December 26, 2011

'Twas The Day After Christmas - Holiday Contest Finalists!

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Yes, I realize it's getting on for midnight - about 18 hours later than I usually post and way past my bedtime :)  But I promised to post the finalists on Monday December 26 and By Gum I'm going to deliver as promised!

(I'll confess, however, that I have absolutely NO IDEA what I was thinking when I promised that.  All these fabulous entries, which required reading and rereading and rereading to narrow down to finalists in the midst of wrapping and baking and celebrating Christmas and my nephew's birthday which was today... I think the fact that I accomplished it, albeit on the late side, proves that I have actual magical powers!)

Before I put up the poll for you to vote for the winner, I just have to say a couple things:

First, I was so gratified by how many people entered the contest - 29 in all!  All you amazing writers took the time to think and create, write and revise, and bravely post your entries for the world to see and me and my trusty assistant to judge, all for my little contest.  You ALL deserve a pat on the back, a round of applause and a celebratory slice of hot apple pie with a big dollop of homemade whipped cream!

Second, I was so impressed by the overall quality of the entries!  So many wonderful ideas, and all so different!  Such creativity!  And some very talented rhymers!  You have no idea how hard it was to have to set wonderful stories aside, one by one, based on relatively nitpicky things because I really couldn't have 29 winners!  Please know that there were many things I loved about the entries that didn't make the final cut.  Finalists were chosen based on originality, quality and appeal of story, and precision of rhyme and meter.  They had to have everything to make the cut.  One or two were culled because they had one but not the other, or because of inconsistency of mood or story.

Third, I realized part way through reading the entries that I did not specify this was meant to be a kids' story.  My mistake, but it made the judging even harder because there were some entries that were clearly intended for children and some that were written from a much more adult perspective.  So you will note that of the six (not three) finalists that I'm posting, 4 are kids and 2 seemed (at least to me) more adult, but all were great stories.

So, enough with the explanations!  On with the voting!

I will post below the 6 finalists (you've noticed, no doubt, that I can never narrow it down as far as I say I'm going to - I'm clearly not cut out to be a judge - I'm not cutthroat enough :)) in no particular order followed by the poll.  I'm also giving three Honorable Mentions (I told you it was really hard to pick and I'm not cut out to be a judge :))

Ready?

#1  (Mars)

Removed per author's request.

#2 (Fishmas)


“Twas the Night Before Fishmas”
Twas the night before Fishmas, when all through the sea,
Not a flipper was flapping, it was still as can  be.
All the fishies were snoozing, snug in their sponge-beds,
As sweet dreams of earthworms, just squirmed through their heads.
When all of a sudden, through seaweed so thick,
Poked the jagged white teeth, and sly smile of Shark Nick!
And straight through the waters, he darted so fast,
He filled every conch-shell with treats that would last.
Chocolate worms, shrimpy-canes, plankton cakes for each fish!
Every conch over-flowed with each sea creature’s wish!
“Merry Fishmas,” he whispered and gave each a pat.
Eat up, little fishies and get plentifully fat!”
Every Fishmas I visit, I happily treat you!
So you’re portly and plump, when I happily eat you!”
Then as quick as he came, he was gone in snap
He shot through seaweed, with a single tail-flap.
But they all heard him snarl, as he swam out of sight,
Go ahead little fishies….Go ahead…Take a bite!”




#3 (Flood)



T’was the eve before Christmas and down by the stream,
the moles squealed and scrambled, as in a bad dream!
The snowstorm that blasted the valley that day
had flooded the tunnels; all nests flushed away.

Mama mole bundled her babies up tight,
shivering, “Where can we spend this cold night?”
Papa mole helped them climb out of the mud.
On mounting the bank, they heard a great ‘thud’.

The family looked up, OH, what a surprise -
a laughing old man dressed in red, filled their eyes.
He knelt in the snow, scooped them up with such love,
gently, he slipped them inside his warm glove.

He’d finished his rounds, then heard of the plight
of riverbank creatures that wet, snowy night.
They swooped on upstream calling out in the dark,
“Any need help? We’re the Santa’s Sleigh-Ark.”

As the sleigh flew along, they gathered a crew,
of rats, otters, mice, and a soggy duck too.
They pulled tight the scarves, all snuggled together,
so grateful for safety from treacherous weather.

The sleigh landed, CRUNCH, on North Pole’s ice strip.
The river crew marveled at their first sky trip.
The reindeer were settled in stable with straw,
but Santa had plans for the damp, homeless poor.

He kindled the fire, put chestnuts to roast,
he smothered with butter and honey, the toast;
he brewed pots of tea, and laid out the mince pies,
then chuckling, he pulled out his festive surprise.

How could he know? Had he planned more to share?
Santa had presents for each of them there.
From wee smallest mole to old grandpa Duck;
they shed a few tears, overwhelmed with their luck.

They pulled Christmas crackers, told jokes old and new,
sipped their mulled wine; hummed yule carols too.
“Three Cheers to Santa, for saving the day!”
The riverbank creatures raised loud their Hooray!

#4 (Rudolph)
'Twas the Night Before Christmas:  Rudolph Goes Green

‘Twas the night before Christmas when there on the screen
Played an eco-documentary with ways to be green.
On the sofa sat Rudolph who suddenly froze
And pulled his front hooves right in front of his nose.

“I’ve got to replace this old iridescent
With an LED light–or at least a fluorescent!”
At once Rudolph dashed to the D.I.Y. store,
And the reindeer pack gasped as he clopped out the door.

“Don’t leave us,” yelled Comet. “You’ll make us all late!
It’s a good thing you’re doing but...Christmas WON’T WAIT!”
“C’mon” scoffed ol’ Blitzen, “Let’s get up and soar,
We can fly without Greenie–we’ve done it before!”

Then up flew eight reindeer with no glowing light,
Leading Santa’s big sleigh on a cold, wintry night.
But the wind and the storms blew a blinding, wet mess
So Donder unwrapped Yumi’s new G-P-S!

Their troubles were past them until Tokyo,
When Santa reminded, “That gift’s gotta go!”
Then Dasher discovered an oversized candle
In shimmery paper with a tag that read: Randall.

In a flash went their stress ‘til they flew o’er Khartoum,
When that “oversized candle” exploded...KA-BOOM!
It kicked up a sandstorm so Prancer thought quick,
Unwrapping a flashlight for young Dominic–

But the batteries died just past the Sahara,
So Vixen dug up Amy’s light-up tiara!
“You hold it,” he bickered, “Too girly for me!”
And they pawed it and clawed ‘til it fell in the sea!

“Now stop it, you guys!” bellowed Santa in back.
“We’ve got presents to give, so no talking smack!”
They straightened right up and squinting their best
Took strange routes from Cape Town to old Budapest.

Eventually they made it, but sore and pooped out,
And when they got home they gave Rudolph a shout:
“You lazy, green-washing...WAIT...that’s the SAME nose!”
Rudolph casually shrugged, “Yeah...the merchant was closed.”

“Well I guess we don’t need you!” the reindeer yelled, peeved.
And to their surprise, Rudolph felt...quite RELIEVED!
“That’s perfect!” he sang, then rushed out the door.
“See you guys in two years, I've joined the Peace Corps!”
#5 (parents)

‘Twas the Night Before Christmas, and all through the night,
We parents were wrapping with all of our might.
The stockings were stuffed but the presents were bare.
“I’ll be more organized next year… I swear!”

We prayed that the children would stay in their beds,
Snuggled in tight with the spreads on their heads.
While Daddy with his screwdriver and I with my tape,
Settled in to the task to make Christmas take shape.

When all of a sudden the dog began barking.
The reflection of bows on the ceiling were sparkling!
I sprang from the couch and led him away –
Into his crate to await Christmas Day.

At last we were ready to load up the tree.
Poor Daddy endured sharp instructions from me.
First this one!  Now that one! Put this one on top.
Be CAREFUL! It’s fragile!  Be sure it won’t drop.

And then we collapsed, exhausted and frayed.
“Oh please let the kids sleep ‘til eight,” we both prayed.
One blink of an eye and we heard the kids cheer,
“Come look at the tree, ‘cause Santa’s been here!”

We groaned in our beds, our eyes red and puffy.
The kids both looked glowing, while we looked quite scruffy.
I brewed us some coffee and scorching hot tea,
Then readied myself for the festivity.

One blink of an eye and the presents were done.
The kids were quite eager to play and have fun.
But as they were cleaning up ribbon and wrapping,
I lay my head down and soon began napping.

As I slipped into dreams, I heard a soft voice
Remind me to savor the day and rejoice.



#6 (school)

‘Twas the week before Christmas when all through the school
The children excitedly prepared for Yule.
The choir sang carols of joy and good cheer,
And how they’d behaved for their parents all year!

The students drew snowmen and reindeer and elves
Which teachers hung proudly upon all the shelves.
My class in pajamas, and I with my book,
Read about the adventures that Santa Claus took.

When out in the hall there arose such a roar
We jumped from our seats and ran to the door.
We peeked ‘round the corner to see what was there,
For a moment the children could only stare.

I cried tears of joy when I saw their bright eyes
The volunteers planned an amazing surprise.
Hot cocoa they poured for the girls and the boys,
And parked in the hall was a train full of toys!

The kids-how they squealed! Their faces aglow
As each took his present tied up with a bow.
This Christmas each angel received a new gift
The worries that this special day would sure lift.

They returned to our classroom so happy to be
Heading home with these gifts to put under the tree
When I opened the door, all the children said “Look!”
On each little desk sat a shiny new book.

“Do you like them?” I asked,  I brought them for you
From every direction came hugs, how they flew!
This Christmas was special, I knew right away
For as long as I lived I’d remember that day.


I'd also like to give Honorable Mention to Erik for his story about the shelter dog - excellent story just right for this time of year! - Cathy for her lovely bear story, and Donna for her barnyard Christmas story, all strong entries!

So here's the poll.  Please vote for the number you feel should win.  I'd love it if you could vote by midnight tomorrow (Tuesday) so I could post the winner Wednesday, but i realize I haven't given you much time.  So if not enough people have voted by midnight tomorrow, I will extend the voting and post the winner Friday with Perfect Picture Books.


Thank you all for writing, reading, and voting, and making this contest SO MUCH FUN!
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29 comments:

  1. I voted! For me there were two stand-outs with particularly clever concepts, rhymes, and word play -- wish I could vote for both! Good luck to all the contenders!

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  2. Thanks for voting, Renee! It was a hard choice!

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  3. Wow! THis is hard to choose but I voted ;)There were so many great poems. Thank you very much for the honorable mention! I liked the challenge of writing it. I hope you had a Merry Christmas!! -Erik

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  4. Great work narrowing down such a rich field of entries! I struggled but finally named a favorite. Thanks for the HM! Here's to lots of wonderful writing and happy reading in 2012!

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  5. So excited to be named a finalist! My thanks to Rudolph for going green... :)

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  6. That was so hard...they were all wonderful.

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  7. I can see why it was so hard. Reading these six and choosing one was SOOOOO difficult. But it's reassuring to know there are so many talented writers out there. Makes me feel I'm among a very special group of dreamers.

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  8. Thanks for taking the time to host this contest!!!! It has been a blast!

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  9. Erik - thanks for voting! And you're welcome for the HM - you earned it!

    Cathy - it wasn't easy! And I hope everyone remembers that any judging is subjective in the end, even when you try to be objective! There are always going to be some things that appeal to one person more than to another. So anyone who didn't make the final cut should not feel bad!

    Miranda - :)

    Delores - they really and truly were - yours included!

    Angela - that's a very nie way of looking at it. And maybe we'll see an entry from you for the next contest...? (hint hint :))

    Penny - it's been so fun! I love reading everyone's amazing entries, and I love how everyone takes the time to read everyone else's entries and comment - it's nice to see everyone being so supportive of one another!

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  10. Great entries and I knew just from reading them earlier it would not be easy to find finalists for this contest. I've voted and really enjoyed reading (and in some cases rereading) these fabulous poems. Now, on to New Year's!

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  11. Thank you, Susanna, for hosting this contest. I've had so much fun and have enjoyed reading all of the wonderful poems!

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  12. Hope I've squeaked in just in time with my vote! (For some reason my notification of your posts doesn't come in until ten o'clock at night here.)

    Great entries!

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  13. Great entires. I was torn between two very good entries and re-read them at least five times before deciding. We have some talent here. Congrations to all of the finalists, the honorable mentions, and all who submitted their stories as I enjoyed reading just about all of them. I almost missed the voting.

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  14. I'm so impressed with everyone's creativity and rhyming ability! I enjoyed all of them but I'm happy with how I've cast my vote. I'll be interested to see who wins! :-)

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  15. They were all very cool, hard decision but I voted.

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  16. I really hope I'm not too late to vote. These are all fantastic. You did a great job narrowing it down Susanna. Have a great day!

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  17. These are all great, but one made me laugh out loud so got my vote.

    Congrats to all! Thanks for the contest Susannah!

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  18. I still need to read a few of the entries. During my Christmas travels, I went dark (not a lot of internet connection). Thanks for doing this Susanna. It was a lot of fun to write, read and vote!

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  19. I also hope I'm not too late to vote. I'm sorry I didn't see this earlier. It really was a tough choice and all of the finalists should be congratulated. Best of luck to everyone! Julie

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  20. Tracy - thanks for voting and I'm so glad you enjoyed the entries. They really were fantastic!

    Kelly - you're welcome! Thank YOU so much for entering! :)

    Beth - no worries - I didn't shut the voting down yet because I wanted to give people time. And I know what you mean - a lot of my email notifications of posts come through many hours late - by the time I get to the post there are 30 comments and I'm the last to see it!

    Pat - I know! It was a very hard choice! i was glad to hand it over to all of you :)

    Cally - there was a lot of creativity and talent - so much fun to read! I will be interested to know who wins, too ... although at this point I have a pretty good idea who it's going to be! :)

    Diane - thanks so much for voting. It WAS a hard decision!

    Catherine - thanks for the vote of confidence and for voting on the contest :) And you're not too late :)

    Jim - I wonder if the one that made you laugh was the same one that made me laugh? Thanks for entering the contest - I really loved the bat idea - very clever! - and thanks for voting!

    Stacy - I know, the timing is difficult. Even I have not been as present on my own blog as usual because of all the visiting family. Don't worry - I'll give you until midnight tonight to cast your vote!

    Julie - you're not too late! Thanks for reading and voting!

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  21. Hello! All the stories were creative and fun. It was hard to decide. I'm a new follower, I hope you are able to visit my kid lit blog too. It's called Bookshelf Detective found on the blog link at www.bookshelfdetective.org

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  22. Love it! You have some very talented friends!

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  23. They were all such fantastic entries, you did well to narrow it down to just 6! I've been away the last few days, so I hope I got in just in time to vote, though it was a hard to decide. Good luck to all the finalists!

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  24. Don't worry! You're in time. I left the poll open longer for precisely that reason. Thanks so much for reading and voting!

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  25. Voted and looking forward to congratulating the winner. I wanted to leave this blog award for you! http://worddiaries.blogspot.com/2011/12/superstar-blogger-award.html

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  26. Congrats to the finalists! Those were awesome!

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  27. Thanks for voting, Saba! And thanks for the award! I'm honored and touched and will go check it out immediately :)

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