tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post893539990616936374..comments2024-02-25T10:47:13.049-05:00Comments on Susanna Leonard Hill: Would You Read It Wednesday #157 - The Penguin And The Pelican (PB) PLUS The November Pitch Pick!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comBlogger79125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-66193101043173071542015-01-19T15:46:40.275-05:002015-01-19T15:46:40.275-05:00Hahaha, Iza! You made me laugh out loud! :) Than...Hahaha, Iza! You made me laugh out loud! :) Thanks so much for your comments for Bekah - luckily your bath adventures didn't harm your ability to give helpful suggestions :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-88710769229933963382015-01-19T13:58:31.974-05:002015-01-19T13:58:31.974-05:00Thank you, Mishka, for the advice! I appreciate y...Thank you, Mishka, for the advice! I appreciate you taking the time to really think about it!Bekahnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-82597628043095314942015-01-19T13:57:31.760-05:002015-01-19T13:57:31.760-05:00Thank you, Erik! I'm picturing the jitterbug ...Thank you, Erik! I'm picturing the jitterbug or tango, but breakdancing could be pretty great!<br />Thanks for reading and commenting on my pitch!Bekahnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-73698656362795942642015-01-19T13:56:15.361-05:002015-01-19T13:56:15.361-05:00Thanks, Michele! I'm going to explore that po...Thanks, Michele! I'm going to explore that possibility. It's so hard to think about adding in more when the story felt complete (to me!), but I think everyone is right about needing something more in the conflict department. Thanks again!Bekahnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-5744178373879505042015-01-19T13:53:56.100-05:002015-01-19T13:53:56.100-05:00Thank you for the suggestions! You all are so nic...Thank you for the suggestions! You all are so nice to read and give advice!Bekahnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-27494336211455507362015-01-19T07:37:39.732-05:002015-01-19T07:37:39.732-05:00Sorry for commenting so late, but I am still recov...Sorry for commenting so late, but I am still recovering form my bath last week :-) Bekah's story has a good theme (and I can just see the illustrations) but I agree with the others that a little more conflict is needed- and I would just hint at the ending and not give it away.Iza Trapaninoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-39803368695316237242015-01-18T14:10:58.159-05:002015-01-18T14:10:58.159-05:00That's so cool! I was adopted back in the dar...That's so cool! I was adopted back in the dark ages of closed adoptions where nobody knew anything about anybody and certainly didn't meet each other.<br />Not NO treats, just share nicely with your friends! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-56313665200147481062015-01-18T12:58:22.603-05:002015-01-18T12:58:22.603-05:00I was 3 days old when my parents legally adopted m...I was 3 days old when my parents legally adopted me but they were there right after I was born. My birthmom asked them to come to the hospital. :)<br />What? No treats? ;)This_Kid_Reviews_Books_Eriknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-20008757108018827882015-01-18T12:45:01.474-05:002015-01-18T12:45:01.474-05:00Thanks so much for chiming in for Bekah, Michelle!...Thanks so much for chiming in for Bekah, Michelle! Very helpful! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-18283037466869470312015-01-18T12:26:26.753-05:002015-01-18T12:26:26.753-05:00Thanks for voting and for your helpful comments fo...Thanks for voting and for your helpful comments for Ms. Hoeft, Erik! As to the treats, though I am always willing to share, I have to draw the line at letting you have them ALL! I need to keep up my strength! As do the other visitors here :) Ohio, eh? I was born in New York City, even though my biological parents were Dutch - Friesian, technically. How old were you when you were adopted? I was 11 months - pretty old!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-85409509011848143892015-01-18T11:50:59.965-05:002015-01-18T11:50:59.965-05:00Nice suggestions for Bekah, Mishka! Thanks for sh...Nice suggestions for Bekah, Mishka! Thanks for sharing :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-31499380337135675672015-01-18T11:23:49.716-05:002015-01-18T11:23:49.716-05:00I love the pairing of the penquin and the pelican ...I love the pairing of the penquin and the pelican friends - two of my favorite birds. I would definitely read it, but I would like to see them tackle a few more obstacles.Michelle Jameshttp://www.michelleclementsjames.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-39567845677122405102015-01-17T08:20:35.909-05:002015-01-17T08:20:35.909-05:00This sounds awesome! Do they end up break dancing?...This sounds awesome! Do they end up break dancing? ;) I would totally read this! I love Penguins (and Pelicans)! :D<br />And Ms. Hill, because I was born in Ohio, I am a true Buckeye fan, so that means that I get all of the treats. ;) Thank you for that wonderful ad, too, by the way!<br />I voted too! It was hard, though. So many good ones! :DThis_Kid_Reviews_Books_Eriknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-53142295645665834232015-01-16T14:21:28.911-05:002015-01-16T14:21:28.911-05:00Voted!
And thank you for the Bath safety warning...Voted! <br /><br />And thank you for the Bath safety warning, Susanna! You have my word that I will not bathe for the rest of this month.Mike Allegra writernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-44052720820089655962015-01-15T21:53:09.852-05:002015-01-15T21:53:09.852-05:00Bekah - I love the pairing of your bird characters...Bekah - I love the pairing of your bird characters but my concern is that learning to dance is too predictable and reminds me a little of Giraffes Can't Dance. <br />It might be more interesting for the characters to explore or try out what they think to be more graceful occupations - perhaps dance being only one of them - before discovering on their own and through each other's help (I'm not sure if new friends are needed to reenforce that) that it's ok and a lot less ridiculous for them to just be themselves. You have a lot of space for a quirky adventure of self discovery. Good luck!Mishka Jaegerhttp://www.mishkajaeger.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-39971208012515684542015-01-15T21:39:20.284-05:002015-01-15T21:39:20.284-05:00No, I certainly am not! :) The S in my name is mo...No, I certainly am not! :) The S in my name is most certainly not for subtlety :) But I am really just kidding :)<br /><br /><br />... or am I? :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-55552491315107781502015-01-15T14:14:16.418-05:002015-01-15T14:14:16.418-05:00You are certainly not shy about broad hints, Susan...You are certainly not shy about broad hints, Susanna! :DTeresa Robesonhttp://teresarobeson.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-17224607941642649012015-01-15T07:24:15.282-05:002015-01-15T07:24:15.282-05:00Thanks, Rosi! I am glad you can see the illustrat...Thanks, Rosi! I am glad you can see the illustration possibilities as well!Bekahnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-91654306270235968252015-01-15T07:22:51.627-05:002015-01-15T07:22:51.627-05:00Thank you, Karen! I appreciate you taking the time...Thank you, Karen! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment!Bekahnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-88528777750849713552015-01-15T07:21:43.476-05:002015-01-15T07:21:43.476-05:00Thanks, Keila! The bars, BTW, have caramel instea...Thanks, Keila! The bars, BTW, have caramel instead of peanut butter, which would be delicious as well! I went to college at a school in Ann Arbor, so I am a Michigan fan, but I will gladly eat ONE'S signature snack any day!Bekahnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-58768001209297487822015-01-15T07:17:37.000-05:002015-01-15T07:17:37.000-05:00Thank you, Jamie, for your suggestions! Thank you, Jamie, for your suggestions! Bekahnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-59142371031314265842015-01-15T05:54:53.116-05:002015-01-15T05:54:53.116-05:00Thank you so much for sharing your reactions with ...Thank you so much for sharing your reactions with Bekah, Jamie! I'm sure she'll find them helpful! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-80050057389711740012015-01-15T05:54:15.576-05:002015-01-15T05:54:15.576-05:00I didn't know I was either, Keila, especially ...I didn't know I was either, Keila, especially since Bekah chose it, but if that's the snack that goes with being a Buckeye fan then rah! rah! :) Thanks so much for your helpful comments for Bekah!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-143019426397374042015-01-15T01:39:16.155-05:002015-01-15T01:39:16.155-05:00Hi Bekah! I vote yes, I would definitely read this...Hi Bekah! I vote yes, I would definitely read this. It's intriguing and I love the pairing of your two main characters. To improve, I think you need to raise the stakes as mentioned in previous comments. Why is it so important for them both to cute their clumsy gate on land? Another thing I noticed is you kind of gave the ending away so you might want to tweak that a bit so readers can't wait find out what happens. Well done!Jamie LB Deenihannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-62973948229191950322015-01-15T00:50:34.697-05:002015-01-15T00:50:34.697-05:00Are those...buckeye bars? I didn't know you we...Are those...buckeye bars? I didn't know you were an Ohio State Collegiate Championship team fan Susanna!<br /><br /><br />On to the goal, er, pitch...dancing clumsy birds made me giggle. What happens to make them want to change their gaits? Before they decide on dance lessons? Choosing to learn to dance is a cute idea, but I'd I'd like to know the stakes. The idea about the animals learning they're not so good at something and having their friends acknowledge they are good at something-that which comes naturally to them-are two good themes for kidlit books.Keila Dawsonnoreply@blogger.com