tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post8905192989480647029..comments2024-02-25T10:47:13.049-05:00Comments on Susanna Leonard Hill: Would You Read It Wednesday #99 - Karina The Dancer (PB)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comBlogger70125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-52858528238264846052013-08-23T17:28:43.324-04:002013-08-23T17:28:43.324-04:00You're welcome, Rachel! I hope you like it :)...You're welcome, Rachel! I hope you like it :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-4806194977620968432013-08-22T07:14:17.988-04:002013-08-22T07:14:17.988-04:00Thanks for the blog address Susanna. I will check...Thanks for the blog address Susanna. I will check it out.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-27144453381619103132013-08-09T00:10:46.868-04:002013-08-09T00:10:46.868-04:00I moved to the US when I was 1.I moved to the US when I was 1.Darshananoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-32933697021440740772013-08-09T00:10:09.643-04:002013-08-09T00:10:09.643-04:00Thanks Angela.Thanks Angela.Darshananoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-78011509425029454572013-08-09T00:09:40.933-04:002013-08-09T00:09:40.933-04:00Yes there are a number of funny scenes, will see h...Yes there are a number of funny scenes, will see how to work it into the pitch. Thanks.Darshananoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-13678120659571022742013-08-09T00:08:47.857-04:002013-08-09T00:08:47.857-04:00Thanks Wendy for the great comments. Will have to ...Thanks Wendy for the great comments. Will have to ponder as I revise the pitch. :)Darshananoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-82375585462666468302013-08-09T00:07:00.452-04:002013-08-09T00:07:00.452-04:00thanks Yvonne!thanks Yvonne!Darshananoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-89142927724057533192013-08-09T00:06:26.055-04:002013-08-09T00:06:26.055-04:00thanks Cally.thanks Cally.Darshananoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-64212818351687752122013-08-09T00:06:03.472-04:002013-08-09T00:06:03.472-04:00Thanks Rachel. I like your suggestion. I second Su...Thanks Rachel. I like your suggestion. I second Susanna's comment about Kerry's site. A lot of good suggestions there.Darshananoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-2346036149340454482013-08-08T13:25:15.737-04:002013-08-08T13:25:15.737-04:00Thank so much for your helpful comments for Darsha...Thank so much for your helpful comments for Darshana, Meg. And yeah... at least one of mine... well, make that two... who are driving can STILL not be trusted to wield fingerpaint. Guess which two? :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-43704226145539214472013-08-08T13:18:25.038-04:002013-08-08T13:18:25.038-04:00Um... let's not talk about bumper cars :) You...Um... let's not talk about bumper cars :) You've never seen me on them either :) And the State of New York does allow me to drive in spite of my bumper car record :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-50412112215208971312013-08-08T08:38:09.152-04:002013-08-08T08:38:09.152-04:00You never saw me on the Bumper Cars! :)You never saw me on the Bumper Cars! :)This_Kid_Reviews_Books_Eriknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-70224271186835474752013-08-08T06:52:29.897-04:002013-08-08T06:52:29.897-04:00Thanks for your very helpful suggestions for Darsh...Thanks for your very helpful suggestions for Darshana, Rachel! Are you familiar with Kerry's blog Picture Books and Pirouettes? http://kerryaradhya.blogspot.com She has lots of dance books there :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-50017442095718438952013-08-08T06:47:13.952-04:002013-08-08T06:47:13.952-04:00Thanks for your comments for Darshana, Cally. And...Thanks for your comments for Darshana, Cally. And as for the parenting things, yes we are! (although I have a 2 year old granddaughter and a new grandbaby due next week so I get some little people time too :)) But who knows? In 16 years, maybe cars will be hovercraft and maybe they'll be so technologically advanced that you can't have accidents :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-44185093771988583322013-08-08T06:41:08.288-04:002013-08-08T06:41:08.288-04:00Thanks so much for your comments for Darshana, Wen...Thanks so much for your comments for Darshana, Wendy. Very insightful. I've actually read this story so I know too much to evaluate the pitch objectively and you brought up some important points that someone who hasn't read the story would need to know.Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-85119385834206162932013-08-08T06:38:53.017-04:002013-08-08T06:38:53.017-04:00Yes, definitely lots of chocolate :) Good luck wi...Yes, definitely lots of chocolate :) Good luck with that! And thanks so much for your comments for Darshana :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-23268369751152586322013-08-08T05:53:16.585-04:002013-08-08T05:53:16.585-04:00Hi Darshana. My daughters love stories about danci...Hi Darshana. My daughters love stories about dancing so I'm sure they'd enjoy your story. Perhaps you could start your pitch with: Free-spirited Karina wants to be a dancing star like her big sister. However, after .... Karina realises her true talent lies in a different dance style. Maybe you could add in a sentence about an adventure/problem she encounters?Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-17761316469906551672013-08-08T02:45:51.275-04:002013-08-08T02:45:51.275-04:00Susanna, we are at two ends of the parenting spect...Susanna, we are at two ends of the parenting spectrum, aren't we? Me with my seven-month-old and you with yours learning how to drive. That thought makes me nervous already. Who knows what the roads will be like in 16 years! LOL <br /><br /><br />Darshana, I like the sound of your story. I agree with Wendy below about to continue to fine tune your pitch to really get people's attention. :-)Cally Jacksonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-65249425996970878402013-08-08T00:07:24.938-04:002013-08-08T00:07:24.938-04:00Susanna, I empathize with you, it won't be lon...Susanna, I empathize with you, it won't be long for my oldest will get his L-plate. I am going to need heaps of that chocolate cake to soothe my nerves! <br /><br />Darshana,<br />I love your blog, and I liked you Facebook page, can't believe I didn't check those out earlier! <br />You have had plenty of great feedback on your pitch already and I don't have anything insightful to add. Of course I would read it! I would try to inject of Karina's spirited character into the pitch to totally wow an agent or editor.Yvonne Mesnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-86929756999715725042013-08-07T22:38:09.549-04:002013-08-07T22:38:09.549-04:00Hi! I love the idea behind the story and the subje...Hi! I love the idea behind the story and the subject matter, so yes I would read it! I do think the pitch falls a little short of the promised free-spirited Karina. After all, if she's free-spirited, why pick a structured dance? Or do her parents sign her up for that and she is initially excited but then realizes she doesn't fit? And is it the same dance her sister does, I assume (but don't know)? I like that you kept the pitch short, but I do think we need to know a little more, or maybe it needs to be just introduced a little differently. Good luck!Wendy Lawrencehttp://thefamilythatreadstogether.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-20321051382114965492013-08-07T21:36:26.533-04:002013-08-07T21:36:26.533-04:00I am not looking forward to my kids driving. I get...I am not looking forward to my kids driving. I get a bit nervous when they are wielding finger paints! :)<br /><br /><br />Darshana, I would read it! Sounds cute. And I think most kids can relate to wanting to be like an older sibling or a friend. I am wondering about the tone of the book. Is it funny? (I can see my free-spirited daughter inserting random dance moves into the structured dance when the spirit moved her. :D ) If the story is funny your pitch might want to illustrate that a bit perhaps? Take that with a grain of salt, I don't know what I'm talking about. :Ddisqus_bENDymTlMvnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-43954110753504630432013-08-07T19:41:49.235-04:002013-08-07T19:41:49.235-04:00Hahaha, Rosi! The rearview mirror :) Lucky you! ...Hahaha, Rosi! The rearview mirror :) Lucky you! :) Thanks so much for your thoughts for Darshana! <br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br />SettingsSusanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-63168974841581901572013-08-07T19:40:27.079-04:002013-08-07T19:40:27.079-04:00Mine seem to alternate between caution/fear, and a...Mine seem to alternate between caution/fear, and abounding (and unmerited!) confidence. It's terrifying :) Enjoy as much chocolate as you like, Penny - you know there is always plenty around here! - and thanks so much for your comments for Darshana!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-53283613437620080612013-08-07T19:38:07.538-04:002013-08-07T19:38:07.538-04:00Thanks for your advice for Darshana, Stacy! And y...Thanks for your advice for Darshana, Stacy! And yeah... driving leaves the bouncy house in the dust! I long for the days of the bouncy house :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-75489906873796112662013-08-07T19:36:57.041-04:002013-08-07T19:36:57.041-04:00I like your approach to driving, Christine :) We ...I like your approach to driving, Christine :) We are lucky. We live on a really barely traveled road where the speed limit is 15mph, so our kids all get to try their wings initially in relative safety. But eventually we must leave our lovely little road and venture into the real world... sigh... if we want to actually GO anywhere :)<br /><br /><br />Thanks so much for your comments for Darshana!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.com