tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post5715698478676517540..comments2024-02-25T10:47:13.049-05:00Comments on Susanna Leonard Hill: Would You Read It Wednesday #96 - The Curse Of The Shattered Sceptre (MG) PLUS The June Pitch PickSusanna Leonard Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comBlogger71125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-66593467251182937802013-07-18T20:34:31.709-04:002013-07-18T20:34:31.709-04:00Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts for Rache...Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts for Rachel, Pat! Seems to be the general consensus that everyone would like to read this book :) <br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br />SettingsSusanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-40098960232567519932013-07-18T20:19:05.190-04:002013-07-18T20:19:05.190-04:00I definitely would read it. Love that it is a cha...I definitely would read it. Love that it is a chapter book and she has more room to tell the story. The pitch is good, but like the other of commented, it needs to be much tighteter, Eliminate the ecess. Good concept for a book.Patriia Tiltonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-63299201690748032662013-07-18T16:47:37.197-04:002013-07-18T16:47:37.197-04:00Thanks for your opinion for Rachel, Coleen. And I...Thanks for your opinion for Rachel, Coleen. And I know. The heat is something else. i feel terribly guilty. The rest of my family is outdoors in the heat putting the finishing touches on a horse show my husband organizes and the kids work at that runs this weekend, and I am also working - on critiques - but in my airconditioned house :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-79041174893767878142013-07-18T16:26:18.424-04:002013-07-18T16:26:18.424-04:00Yes--most intrigued by the very last line of the p...Yes--most intrigued by the very last line of the pitch!<br />It's icky hot here too, Susanna. I started a walk, but got halfway down the street and turned around. I probably wouldn't even have left the house, had I had any profiteroles in my kitchen.:)coleen patrickhttp://coleenpatrick.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-27851826464891513312013-07-18T13:18:14.709-04:002013-07-18T13:18:14.709-04:00I appreciate your vote of confidence, Teresa, but ...I appreciate your vote of confidence, Teresa, but I'm afraid your faith is misplaced :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-91547414009622938942013-07-18T08:53:41.703-04:002013-07-18T08:53:41.703-04:00I'll bet you could make these, Susanna! You ar...I'll bet you could make these, Susanna! You are so talented in so many ways. :) and I have friends who tell me they're easy to make.Teresa Robesonhttp://teresarobeson.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-31657353530097706792013-07-18T08:52:02.060-04:002013-07-18T08:52:02.060-04:00Rachel, I really, really hope we'll see your b...Rachel, I really, really hope we'll see your book in print soon!Teresa Robesonhttp://teresarobeson.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-21605433442237511022013-07-18T05:37:25.137-04:002013-07-18T05:37:25.137-04:00You're very welcome, Rachel! Thank YOU for br...You're very welcome, Rachel! Thank YOU for bravely putting your pitch out there for everyone to enjoy and learn from. It's nice that the general consensus was that we all wanted to read your book :) And yes, of course you may send in more pitches. I don't like to put anyone twice in the same month because then they compete against themselves in the pitch pick, but other than that it's first come first served :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-78160183540159916362013-07-18T05:05:29.161-04:002013-07-18T05:05:29.161-04:00A huge thank you to Susanna too for giving me the ...A huge thank you to Susanna too for giving me the opportunity to be part of Would you Read it Wednesday. I'll have to scrub up another pitch and send it in later in the year - if you're allowed to do more than one!?Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-58943244510210311932013-07-17T23:52:41.865-04:002013-07-17T23:52:41.865-04:00Thank you everyone for your very thoughtful and he...Thank you everyone for your very thoughtful and helpful comments. I have jotted down lots of notes so I can delete, add and rearrange sentences to improve my pitch. It's so tricky to say all the important bits in just a few sentences without giving too much away!!<br /><br /><br />Have a great day,<br />RachelRachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-68737149104724852162013-07-17T23:48:27.539-04:002013-07-17T23:48:27.539-04:00Thanks for your lovely comments Heather. A few pe...Thanks for your lovely comments Heather. A few people have mentioned starting with "After accidentally unleashing.." and I do like the sound of that. Will have to do some deleting and rearranging!Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-49386942060813932622013-07-17T23:44:29.807-04:002013-07-17T23:44:29.807-04:00Thanks for your comments Linda.Thanks for your comments Linda.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-18987786452015423292013-07-17T23:40:34.618-04:002013-07-17T23:40:34.618-04:00Yes, I need to work on a sentence to mention why O...Yes, I need to work on a sentence to mention why Ollie and his friends must mend the shattered sceptre - but without giving too much away!! Thanks for that Andrea.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-7692774786774200592013-07-17T23:37:51.712-04:002013-07-17T23:37:51.712-04:00Thanks Catherine. Glad you liked my pitch.Thanks Catherine. Glad you liked my pitch.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-62465794049915691362013-07-17T23:35:08.705-04:002013-07-17T23:35:08.705-04:00Yes it's going to be tricky - what to leave, w...Yes it's going to be tricky - what to leave, what to cut out, what to add. Thanks for your comment Delores.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-31628126345300386142013-07-17T23:32:55.952-04:002013-07-17T23:32:55.952-04:00Thanks for commenting Wendy. Yes, I didn't ev...Thanks for commenting Wendy. Yes, I didn't even think about writing about the stakes. Just jotting down a few ideas now...Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-56367105323434220282013-07-17T23:28:49.370-04:002013-07-17T23:28:49.370-04:00Thanks Joanne for your helpful suggestions. You&#...Thanks Joanne for your helpful suggestions. You've given me a lot to think about as I definitely don't want the story to be predictable. Now to include the "what" without writing too much and giving away the end of the story!Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-90212939858481267792013-07-17T23:19:51.294-04:002013-07-17T23:19:51.294-04:00Thanks for that Rachel!Thanks for that Rachel!Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-21016638715404209592013-07-17T23:18:26.896-04:002013-07-17T23:18:26.896-04:00Thanks for your ideas Stacy. Now I need to work o...Thanks for your ideas Stacy. Now I need to work out how to add in a bit about the stakes.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-66113420770273487732013-07-17T23:14:37.516-04:002013-07-17T23:14:37.516-04:00Thanks Rosi. I'm hoping my story will encoura...Thanks Rosi. I'm hoping my story will encourage boys to read as all the characters in the story are boys and they all love books.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-10824365667855921652013-07-17T23:11:17.531-04:002013-07-17T23:11:17.531-04:00Thanks for your help Julie. You've tightened ...Thanks for your help Julie. You've tightened up the pitch a lot.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-61258700073823135742013-07-17T22:56:51.938-04:002013-07-17T22:56:51.938-04:00Thanks Stacy. I see what you mean. The zany char...Thanks Stacy. I see what you mean. The zany characters only appear a few times throughout the story whereas his friends are with him the whole time.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-38424742513616064702013-07-17T22:46:25.946-04:002013-07-17T22:46:25.946-04:00Thanks Sarah. I will get rid of 'that'.Thanks Sarah. I will get rid of 'that'.Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-24254051938444675322013-07-17T22:45:27.986-04:002013-07-17T22:45:27.986-04:00Thanks for your lovely comments Penny. Glad you l...Thanks for your lovely comments Penny. Glad you like my story. Fingers crossed hey!!??Rachelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-32379594991317021112013-07-17T22:44:09.074-04:002013-07-17T22:44:09.074-04:00Thanks for adding your comment Cheryl. Everyone&#...Thanks for adding your comment Cheryl. Everyone's comments are really motivating me to continue writing and editing until I get it right!Rachelnoreply@blogger.com