tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post4283844281324015016..comments2024-02-25T10:47:13.049-05:00Comments on Susanna Leonard Hill: Would You Read It Wednesday # 126 - Martin's Perfect Web (PB) PLUS The February Pitch PickSusanna Leonard Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comBlogger84125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-65843941828048800612014-03-21T12:28:30.323-04:002014-03-21T12:28:30.323-04:00Thank you, Tracy :)Thank you, Tracy :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-16823061625575609222014-03-21T12:23:11.814-04:002014-03-21T12:23:11.814-04:00Hi Beth, I was reading your comments to Julie, and...Hi Beth, I was reading your comments to Julie, and glad to hear you've made changes to what sounds like a great story. And Susanna, for the record, I voted! :-)Tracy Campbellhttp://tracycampbell.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-13984459184172348732014-03-20T02:22:17.389-04:002014-03-20T02:22:17.389-04:00Would be happy to read the new one if you'd li...Would be happy to read the new one if you'd like!Julie Rowan-Zochhttp://julierowanzoch.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-57938189306204707542014-03-19T22:59:30.000-04:002014-03-19T22:59:30.000-04:00Genevieve- thanks for your comments - - -"wor...Genevieve- thanks for your comments - - -"workin on it it - yesireeeee!"Beth Hallerannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-69136369742865254392014-03-19T22:58:04.292-04:002014-03-19T22:58:04.292-04:00You are tooo kind! Zank you vedy much!You are tooo kind! Zank you vedy much!Beth Hallerannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-12975450237373490152014-03-19T22:57:16.103-04:002014-03-19T22:57:16.103-04:00Vivian - thanks so much for your comments!Vivian - thanks so much for your comments!Beth Hallerannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-88584531512296776122014-03-19T22:56:30.464-04:002014-03-19T22:56:30.464-04:00HI Julie - I actually changed the pitch markedly 1...HI Julie - I actually changed the pitch markedly 1 week after submitting. I realized that it did not really go into the storyline. So - yeah - I got you! :)Beth Hallerannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-28206207558575362112014-03-19T22:54:48.991-04:002014-03-19T22:54:48.991-04:00thanks Rosi - workin on it!thanks Rosi - workin on it!Beth Hallerannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-68184544216902185062014-03-19T21:48:26.097-04:002014-03-19T21:48:26.097-04:00Chocolate silk pie -- yummmmm. Thanks! I would pro...Chocolate silk pie -- yummmmm. Thanks! I would probably read the book. I find the OCD connection a compelling one, although I have a little trouble picturing a friendship between a dragon and a spider, but that's a problem on my end. I also think losing the "utter disbelief" would be an improvement.Rosinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-15748010111714099432014-03-19T21:26:40.995-04:002014-03-19T21:26:40.995-04:00I picked a pitch I presume is perfect! lol
I wou...I picked a pitch I presume is perfect! lol<br /><br /><br />I would read Beth's, but it's a bit big-wordy. I find myself focussed too much to the bigger words and less on the storyline. Yeah, I'm weird like that! maybe substitute a word or two to keep my head in the game. Of course, I am probably the only one who noticed them!Julie Rowan-Zochhttp://julierowanzoch.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-24795112172194750842014-03-19T20:18:08.002-04:002014-03-19T20:18:08.002-04:00Thanks you so much for your insightful comments fo...Thanks you so much for your insightful comments for Beth, Kirsten - very helpful! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-69463806582751667152014-03-19T20:17:33.353-04:002014-03-19T20:17:33.353-04:00Thanks for voting, and for your thoughts for Beth,...Thanks for voting, and for your thoughts for Beth, Joanna! And yes, sigh, I thought it was clear, but the number of emails I've gotten suggests otherwise :) No matter, we will hopefully all have tons of fun anyway :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-88246117393711486382014-03-19T20:16:29.284-04:002014-03-19T20:16:29.284-04:00Thanks so much for your helpful comments for Beth,...Thanks so much for your helpful comments for Beth, Stacy, and for voting. As for my tale... we shall see what happens... you will all be subjected to it in short order since I've only got about 4 hours left to get it done :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-44099958980960618062014-03-19T20:15:13.714-04:002014-03-19T20:15:13.714-04:00Thanks so much for voting even though it was hard,...Thanks so much for voting even though it was hard, Pat, and for your comments for Beth! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-8950552351360101622014-03-19T20:14:45.074-04:002014-03-19T20:14:45.074-04:00Thanks so much for your thoughts for Beth, Deborah...Thanks so much for your thoughts for Beth, Deborah! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-88538923174782634952014-03-19T20:14:18.501-04:002014-03-19T20:14:18.501-04:00Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments for Be...Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments for Beth, Steve! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-85087763530932086752014-03-19T20:13:42.298-04:002014-03-19T20:13:42.298-04:00Thanks so much for your two cents, Julie! :)Thanks so much for your two cents, Julie! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-35467577784093687932014-03-19T20:13:27.226-04:002014-03-19T20:13:27.226-04:00Thanks so much for chiming in and sharing your per...Thanks so much for chiming in and sharing your perspective for Beth, Genevieve! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-81455144649243076232014-03-19T20:13:01.326-04:002014-03-19T20:13:01.326-04:00Thank you for your very helpful suggestions for Be...Thank you for your very helpful suggestions for Beth, Takara! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-92168867428057179292014-03-19T20:12:09.784-04:002014-03-19T20:12:09.784-04:00Lovely to hear such unabashed praise, Kristine :) ...Lovely to hear such unabashed praise, Kristine :) And if you've read the whole story then you have the inside scoop :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-66232550113237534872014-03-19T20:11:02.175-04:002014-03-19T20:11:02.175-04:00Thank you for all your thoughtful comments for Bet...Thank you for all your thoughtful comments for Beth, Vivian! And I'm afraid your faith in me is misplaced - my story will be bottom of the barrel! - but I can't wait to read yours!!! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-86244754803401172982014-03-19T18:55:41.318-04:002014-03-19T18:55:41.318-04:00Four great pitches to pick from...difficult, but I...Four great pitches to pick from...difficult, but I did vote.:)<br />And thanks for the yummy chocolate, Susanna...I need it after writing my Fractured Fairy Tale...and I know you will come up with something super...you always do.:) I'm so excited to post tomorrow and link up with you!<br />I would definitely read Beth's story...I think OCD is a topic that needs more books geared to kids...I didn't have a problem with using OCD, but I do understand the point that using a word like perfectionist might help the book appeal to kids (and parents) who are not diagnosed, but have issues with this.<br />Love the ride on the dragon...and agree that it is not necessary to say dragon's tail...and I love the suggestion to leave off the utter disbelief. Sorry I don't have any further pitch fixes...but Beth, you did such a good job with it already, there isn't much to fix. :)Vivian Kirkfieldnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-12301196445969014912014-03-19T18:43:39.043-04:002014-03-19T18:43:39.043-04:00Since I am your critique partner, I'm 4000% bi...Since I am your critique partner, I'm 4000% biased, but of course I'd read it! You have such a wonderful imagination Beth, and it is always so much fun to see the completely original stories you create!Kristine Pnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-41671064748654910782014-03-19T18:35:06.804-04:002014-03-19T18:35:06.804-04:00My mind paused when the tail was identified as how...My mind paused when the tail was identified as how he romped, it narrowed my many ideas from romp, swing, dangle and slip from the dragon's claws, jaws and wings to just the tail. I also paused on 'utter disbelief'. I didn't have a problem with using obsessive compulsive, the two words summed up a really cool and interesting character who experiences a lot of trouble along the way. <br /><br />e.g. In a quest to build the perfect web, an obsessive compulsive spider confronts his biggest fears through an unlikely friendship with an inquisitive dragon. In a wild ride on 'dragon, Martin learns to let go and create his most perfect web yet'.Takara Beechnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-59761331790235810662014-03-19T18:26:02.879-04:002014-03-19T18:26:02.879-04:00I love a spider-meets-dragon story with a happy en...I love a spider-meets-dragon story with a happy ending, so yes. I would read it. I agree with the suggested "fussy" or "perfectionist" in place of OCD. Good luck with it.Genevievenoreply@blogger.com