tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post4111641859827196323..comments2024-02-25T10:47:13.049-05:00Comments on Susanna Leonard Hill: Would You Read It Wednesday #140 - Escalators Don't Bite! A Little Traveler's Guide To Airports (PB) PLUS The May Pitch PickSusanna Leonard Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comBlogger51125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-82076000029261238702014-07-05T10:15:40.344-04:002014-07-05T10:15:40.344-04:00Yay! You're back! Now you're gone! ;) Have...Yay! You're back! Now you're gone! ;) Have fun in PA! :D<br />I'd read the book. It sounds great!<br />Erik<br />P.S. I voted! :DThis_Kid_Reviews_Books_Eriknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-32689053499636519492014-07-03T15:32:06.229-04:002014-07-03T15:32:06.229-04:00Thanks for reading!Thanks for reading!Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-30198631395151340692014-07-03T15:31:47.791-04:002014-07-03T15:31:47.791-04:00Thank you for commenting! I sing your Twinkle Twin...Thank you for commenting! I sing your Twinkle Twinkle Little Star to my kids all the time--I'm a little "starstruck" (okay, pun intended). I'm so glad to hear that Salim's character is coming through to you in the pitch.Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-71278237724310678712014-07-03T10:16:50.677-04:002014-07-03T10:16:50.677-04:00So glad you had a great time at NJSCBWI!
I love Mi...So glad you had a great time at NJSCBWI!<br />I love Michelle's pitch. I think it's a perfect title and the pitch is well written and concise. I even like the word "serious"- not just for the alliteration but because it gives us a sense of Salim's personality. I can just picture this safety-minded,maybe a bit controlling but caring older brother researching and compiling his list.Iza Trapaninoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-66681055616274342062014-07-02T23:29:31.547-04:002014-07-02T23:29:31.547-04:00Yes, I'd read it. Very cute premise and a good...Yes, I'd read it. Very cute premise and a good book for little travelers! The only thing I suggest is deleting the word "serious" in front of Salim. <br /><br />Glad u got to meet so many online friends, Susanna! Sounds like fun!Tina Chonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-63199893621964374732014-07-02T20:25:11.345-04:002014-07-02T20:25:11.345-04:00Kimberly, I appreciate the close look! Your feedba...Kimberly, I appreciate the close look! Your feedback is incredibly valuable and I will definitely take it into consideration. I need to find a way to connect the story I want to tell to readers, and that means resolving anything that causes them to stumble. I thank you for helping me clarify my vision for this book, so that I may better express it.Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-78660369592528636662014-07-02T20:11:12.831-04:002014-07-02T20:11:12.831-04:00You may remember well what it feels like to stand ...You may remember well what it feels like to stand at the top of an escalator with five suitcases, a toddler and a baby…or maybe you were smart enough to take the elevator!Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-36151675473645957482014-07-02T20:08:44.300-04:002014-07-02T20:08:44.300-04:00I think you--and many others--are right about &quo...I think you--and many others--are right about "Escalators Don't Bite" being a better hook on its own. Thank you for weighing in!Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-65958639329599173682014-07-02T20:05:18.115-04:002014-07-02T20:05:18.115-04:00Working on specifics now…I love how paying close a...Working on specifics now…I love how paying close attention to the pitch circles back into more clarity and energy in the ms itself. Thanks for reading!Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-50489294134982552792014-07-02T19:59:39.754-04:002014-07-02T19:59:39.754-04:00Definitely a travel book within a story. But I nee...Definitely a travel book within a story. But I need to make those lines more clear in the ms and in the pitch. Working on it...Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-37340959843838256722014-07-02T19:58:51.148-04:002014-07-02T19:58:51.148-04:00Thank you for the encouragement, Brandie.Thank you for the encouragement, Brandie.Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-46811790572542435592014-07-02T19:58:29.912-04:002014-07-02T19:58:29.912-04:00Thank you, Stacy.Thank you, Stacy.Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-21053318132573591862014-07-02T19:58:16.014-04:002014-07-02T19:58:16.014-04:00Thank you for reading, Rosi.Thank you for reading, Rosi.Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-90752794779518233752014-07-02T19:58:01.484-04:002014-07-02T19:58:01.484-04:00Thanks for the idea, Lucy! My husband thought it c...Thanks for the idea, Lucy! My husband thought it could be a board book with a pocket for a "passport" and a carabiner to attach it to little travelers' backpacks.Michelle Hackelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-16188238524788961682014-07-02T19:33:13.633-04:002014-07-02T19:33:13.633-04:00I like the idea of a traveler's guide. It coul...I like the idea of a traveler's guide. It could be one of tose interactive books where the kids can lift flaps, etc. Just an idea!Lucy Anne Jenningshttp://www.creativelittlereaders.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-653967649461576382014-07-02T19:31:23.785-04:002014-07-02T19:31:23.785-04:00I have kids, but they're 16 and 18. :)I have kids, but they're 16 and 18. :)Teresa Robesonhttp://teresarobeson.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-70570510186120039082014-07-02T18:22:27.442-04:002014-07-02T18:22:27.442-04:00You're welcome Michelle! I love the idea of a ...You're welcome Michelle! I love the idea of a sibling being a 'planner' to keep everyone on track!Kim Pfennigwerthnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-89251034102937410452014-07-02T18:20:20.565-04:002014-07-02T18:20:20.565-04:00Thanks Donna!Thanks Donna!Kim Pfennigwerthnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-78783270549404638772014-07-02T18:15:48.668-04:002014-07-02T18:15:48.668-04:00Hey, Kim :D Love your take on the pitch!Hey, Kim :D Love your take on the pitch!:Donna Marienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-50804512743164747082014-07-02T18:14:52.065-04:002014-07-02T18:14:52.065-04:00I totally get that, Michelle, but what I was think...I totally get that, Michelle, but what I was thinking, too, is that excluding the "traveler's guide" info will allow for more curiosity, especially for a picture book. I think more people would pull it off a bookstore shelf without it, then find out about the "traveler's guide" part on the jacket flap or in the story itself. That includes for the pitch. It's just a better hook, I think :):Donna Marienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-87140195140614933802014-07-02T18:02:26.774-04:002014-07-02T18:02:26.774-04:00This sounds like a very cute story and one that wo...This sounds like a very cute story and one that would be really useful. Yes, I would definitely read it.Rosinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-9431304844069658032014-07-02T17:46:00.013-04:002014-07-02T17:46:00.013-04:00Oh, I wish I were in Jersey! You went, Susanna--an...Oh, I wish I were in Jersey! You went, Susanna--and so many people I know online went too! Hope you had a blast, enjoyed dessert, and sang karoake.<br />The story has a clever concept, Micelle--an airport angle. I agree with much of the advice given: if it's a fiction PB, about Salim, I'd love to know more about him and his sis. <br />And congrats to all the writers who submitted pitches. I saw some FABULOUS re-writes, and seriously good pitches.Stacy Couchhttp://twitter.com/couchminenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-38294208266730531372014-07-02T17:45:56.128-04:002014-07-02T17:45:56.128-04:00Well, whatever you do, I think it is a great idea ...Well, whatever you do, I think it is a great idea and judging from the feedback you are getting others do too! Good Job!Arlenenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-76960193902045229392014-07-02T17:23:23.122-04:002014-07-02T17:23:23.122-04:00Sometimes I wonder if I look at these pitches a bi...Sometimes I wonder if I look at these pitches a bit TOO closely. Forgetting the fact that when and editor/agent reads it they'll have the rest of your query to get a bit more info from and readers will have cover illustrations to go off of too. So sorry if I read into it too much (my brain works in silly ways sometimes!). <br /><br />That's so awesome that his name means safe. I can just see him saying, "Safe is my middle name. Wait, actually, it's my first name!" :)<br /><br />I also forget that not everyone is at the same point with their ms when they create a pitch. Some have been working on one for years and are ready to submit whereas others my be throwing an idea out there to see if they should put the effort into writing a ms, and everywhere in between! So whatever point you are at I wish you the best, as I said before, this is a fantastic idea!Kimberly Cowgernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-25276809364507448032014-07-02T17:04:44.043-04:002014-07-02T17:04:44.043-04:00Thanks for the plug, Michelle. And best of luck wi...Thanks for the plug, Michelle. And best of luck with this story.Alayne Kay Christiannoreply@blogger.com