tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post7195928503779104289..comments2024-02-25T10:47:13.049-05:00Comments on Susanna Leonard Hill: Would You Read It Wednesday - The 36th Pitch... And Some Fun Stuff For You!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comBlogger81125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-17656615701168783092013-02-21T18:13:10.307-05:002013-02-21T18:13:10.307-05:00Thanks Christie. Though NASA retired the Space Shu...Thanks Christie. Though NASA retired the Space Shuttles, there are plenty of rockets to go around. I think Space Shuttle Discovery just arrived in Washington, DC yesterday.Kirsten Larsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-28978423055025304942012-04-23T19:42:46.188-04:002012-04-23T19:42:46.188-04:00Thanks so much for the comment Lori!Thanks so much for the comment Lori!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-10141351947050485092012-04-23T18:39:05.527-04:002012-04-23T18:39:05.527-04:00I'd read it - it's intriguing - and I'...I'd read it - it's intriguing - and I'm not a big science person! I think you could combine the two parts to make it more concise: <br /><br />Space is a place of opposites. Everyday scientists discover burning stars and icy comets; roaring rockets and silent stillness; an ancient universe and newborn planets. Come along and explore our amazing universe.Ldegmannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-54945707859682814042012-04-20T13:26:49.941-04:002012-04-20T13:26:49.941-04:00Very interesting question, because that is a topic...Very interesting question, because that is a topic that's been done a lot. I would be interested in her answer too :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-41405749552919648062012-04-20T06:37:17.805-04:002012-04-20T06:37:17.805-04:00It's not my pitch, but I like your suggestion ...It's not my pitch, but I like your suggestion Sharron!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-38978255936893968382012-04-20T06:31:42.714-04:002012-04-20T06:31:42.714-04:00Great questions, Erik! I'll add them to the l...Great questions, Erik! I'll add them to the list!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-11457598193985826682012-04-20T06:24:04.932-04:002012-04-20T06:24:04.932-04:00Looks like we're going o do a Q&A so let m...Looks like we're going o do a Q&A so let me know if you have and Qs :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-33246713714800848622012-04-20T05:41:03.579-04:002012-04-20T05:41:03.579-04:00Hi Kirsten,
I would definitely read your book bas...Hi Kirsten, <br />I would definitely read your book based on your pitch. The opposites you've used sound so exciting. My suggestions for improving your pitch would be to start with your opposites and remove the sentence beginning 'Everyday scientists...' as I think you've already given us enough examples of opposites before then. In my opinion, Darshana was spot on with the suggestion she gave you for how to change your pitch. Hope this is helpful and good luck with your book!Rebecca Colbyhttp://www.rebeccacolbybooks.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-41753291058346915062012-04-20T04:50:35.688-04:002012-04-20T04:50:35.688-04:00I would definitely read Kirsten's book. Sure, ...I would definitely read Kirsten's book. Sure, the pitch could be tightened, but I found it really lyrical and poetic and kind of mesmerizing. Well done!Renee LaTulippehttp://www.nowaterriver.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-5169708550395980462012-04-19T23:53:53.112-04:002012-04-19T23:53:53.112-04:00I was so excited to see a non-fic PB for 5 + about...I was so excited to see a non-fic PB for 5 + about space, but was immediately deflated by the wordiness. This pitch wouldn't excite me very much. Come along and explore might sound better like this: 'Zoom between the stars, ride on a comet, and touch the heavens.' Just a thought.Sharronnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-65119297861397065252012-04-19T23:42:16.769-04:002012-04-19T23:42:16.769-04:00Sorry, Kirsten... I know who you are. Sorry for th...Sorry, Kirsten... I know who you are. Sorry for the name slip. :PHannah Holthttp://www.lightbulbbooks.com/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-40629214321400595032012-04-19T23:40:38.873-04:002012-04-19T23:40:38.873-04:00Yes, I would read it, Kristen. I remember your pit...Yes, I would read it, Kristen. I remember your pitch although it's also new (old and new perhaps?) If I would change one thing it's this: shorten it to two-three sentences. You would still have a strong pitch if you picked your three favorite opposite examples. Good luck! I'm cheering for you!Hannah Holthttp://www.lightbulbbooks.com/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-87009824063610745392012-04-19T22:38:14.746-04:002012-04-19T22:38:14.746-04:00Well if it works for you, we're happy! :)Well if it works for you, we're happy! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-78334424782856896932012-04-19T19:18:34.600-04:002012-04-19T19:18:34.600-04:00For Erin: I wonder if a ms with monsters and bedti...For Erin: I wonder if a ms with monsters and bedtime is has been written about too much and if she would just throw it in the trash without reading the whole pitch or does she think there's a chance for it to go through. <br />ThanksClarike Bowman-Jahnhttp://www.facebook.com/cbowmanjahnnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-66872697890173145682012-04-19T16:24:07.669-04:002012-04-19T16:24:07.669-04:00Everyone seems excited about a Q&A! This shoul...Everyone seems excited about a Q&A! This should be fun! And no worries - everyone is busy! If you've figured out time management please let me know how to do it!!! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-30893313041220875832012-04-19T15:49:06.807-04:002012-04-19T15:49:06.807-04:00This seems to be the popular response and question...This seems to be the popular response and questions are flooding in, so send any you have :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-47271811667843266052012-04-19T15:48:09.972-04:002012-04-19T15:48:09.972-04:00Me too - although in the PB world it seems like th...Me too - although in the PB world it seems like they're not buying too many :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-24826711223541287122012-04-19T15:47:37.173-04:002012-04-19T15:47:37.173-04:00Novelty = board book, lift-the-flap, pop-up, scrat...Novelty = board book, lift-the-flap, pop-up, scratch 'n' sniff, touch & feel etc. PB is just a regular picture book.Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-89089857107549437142012-04-19T15:46:02.217-04:002012-04-19T15:46:02.217-04:00Great question, Jarm! Adding it to the list!Great question, Jarm! Adding it to the list!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-18462456143857980402012-04-19T15:44:49.066-04:002012-04-19T15:44:49.066-04:00Thanks, Miranda!Thanks, Miranda!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-87833541182224759542012-04-19T13:26:38.254-04:002012-04-19T13:26:38.254-04:00Yes, I would reread it!!! Can't wait to see th...Yes, I would reread it!!! Can't wait to see this published Kirsten. Great job on the pitch.Jennifer Younghttp://www.facebook.com/jlyoung2007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-55532106256569478242012-04-19T10:27:47.675-04:002012-04-19T10:27:47.675-04:00Great questions! I'll add them to the list :)...Great questions! I'll add them to the list :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-72943815112122136112012-04-19T07:32:16.827-04:002012-04-19T07:32:16.827-04:00Great! Everyone seems enthusiastic about that ide...Great! Everyone seems enthusiastic about that idea so that's probably what we'll do!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-36400291811130134352012-04-19T07:29:12.044-04:002012-04-19T07:29:12.044-04:00My mind is blank a lot! :) Don't worry - you ...My mind is blank a lot! :) Don't worry - you have some time to think!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-61017171920426211352012-04-19T07:28:40.432-04:002012-04-19T07:28:40.432-04:00Excellent question!Excellent question!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.com