tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post5969172831636659916..comments2024-02-25T10:47:13.049-05:00Comments on Susanna Leonard Hill: Would You Read It Wednesday - The 55th PitchSusanna Leonard Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comBlogger43125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-10786971576580106502012-09-03T06:38:55.823-04:002012-09-03T06:38:55.823-04:00Thanks so much for your comment for Rachel, Sharro...Thanks so much for your comment for Rachel, Sharron, and I hope you find your dining room table :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-11734239922535487232012-09-02T19:57:49.593-04:002012-09-02T19:57:49.593-04:00I would definitely read it. The title is delightfu...I would definitely read it. The title is delightful. <br /><br /><br />I think Rachel should rethink this line. Two: She really doesn't care. But her mother, the Queen, is determined .... I think it would read better as this: Two: Her mother, the Queen, is determined. The really doesn't care makes her sound petulant. Or something. <br /><br /><br />The 'better late than never' would benefit with quotes or half-quotes or whatever they call them. It stopped me for a moment, and that is a death knell. <br /><br /><br />Best of luck to you!<br /><br /><br />PS - Must clean my dining room table!Sharronnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-24542865543972164682012-08-31T11:15:14.549-04:002012-08-31T11:15:14.549-04:00Thanks so much for your comment for Rachel, Pam, a...Thanks so much for your comment for Rachel, Pam, and don't worry - you're not even really late - it's still the same week :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-3159276728689119032012-08-31T10:55:43.104-04:002012-08-31T10:55:43.104-04:00Okay, I hope the adage, "better late than nev...Okay, I hope the adage, "better late than never" can apply to me. So sorry, Rachel. Nevertheless, this sounds like it would be such a fun, fun, read! YES, I would certainly read! I hope I'm not repeating what anyone else has posted. It looks like three problems: The dancing ability, The attitude regarding dancing, and Queen Mother's antics/frustrations... Have you considered making the Princess' attitude toward dancing and her dancing ability one conflict and the Queen Mother's antics and frustration the other conflict? Does that make sense?Pamela Courtneyhttp://mylmnopreadstokids.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-30873333157390897082012-08-31T06:21:02.381-04:002012-08-31T06:21:02.381-04:00Posted from Rachel:
A big thank you to everyone ...Posted from Rachel:<br /><br /><br />A big thank you to everyone for taking the time to comment, and for sharing your wonderful advice! It makes me so happy to read so many yeses. :) And Vivian, encouraging kids to be themselves and do their own thing is exactly what I wanted to do! Thanks for your comment!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-82756774563924381532012-08-30T21:45:11.926-04:002012-08-30T21:45:11.926-04:00You husband with his art supplies sounds like me a...You husband with his art supplies sounds like me and my writing supplies - spread over every available surface :) Thanks for your comment for Rachel! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-1901594155559294142012-08-30T21:21:25.900-04:002012-08-30T21:21:25.900-04:00Regarding cleaning out clutter...I keep moving tha...Regarding cleaning out clutter...I keep moving that particular item from one to-do list to the next! I used to have an office (actually the guest bedroom)...but when my husband became involved in watercolor painting 2 years ago and the entire house (every room and available surface) was covered and cluttered with painting supplies, I gave him my office to use as his art studio...with a promise that the art supplies would remain in THAT room. Too bad I didn't get a signed contract for that agreement...since now he has my office AND the art stuff has "crept" back into the rest of the house. Oh well, at least I don't have a cluttered office. :) :) By the way, Susanna, good luck with the de-cluttering!<br /><br />Regarding the pitch...Rachel, I love the story concept...a princess who needs to dance in order to win the prince...but doesn't know how. And I love her name. :) Perhaps the pitch can be tightened up a bit...I know they say it should be short, but powerful. But I would DEFINITELY read the book...sounds like it will encourage kids to believe in themselves.Vivian Kirkfieldhttp://twitter.com/viviankirkfieldnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-39486412058028692602012-08-30T20:08:32.546-04:002012-08-30T20:08:32.546-04:00Thanks so much for your comment for Rachel, Peggy!...Thanks so much for your comment for Rachel, Peggy! And hours? My office is going to take DAYS... especially if I keep stalling :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-56112498868557248702012-08-30T17:04:18.785-04:002012-08-30T17:04:18.785-04:00I would totally read it! I think it's so relat...I would totally read it! I think it's so relatable to little girls. They love to pretend to be princesses sometimes, and do very un-princess-like things at others. Un-princess-like things that their moms really don't want them to do. ;) <br /><br />And I SOOOO need to do that to my office, too! But yeah. It'd take hours.Peggy Eddlemannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-16105552535871038472012-08-30T16:56:35.760-04:002012-08-30T16:56:35.760-04:00Thanks so much for your comment for Rachel, Sidney...Thanks so much for your comment for Rachel, Sidney! It does sound fun, doesn't it? :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-83100769124547843502012-08-30T14:49:39.669-04:002012-08-30T14:49:39.669-04:00The story sounds fun. I would be interested in rea...The story sounds fun. I would be interested in reading about some of the princess' hilarious high jinks.Sidney Schuhmann Levesquenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-43833067132640731602012-08-30T07:05:10.848-04:002012-08-30T07:05:10.848-04:00Thanks for making time in your very busy day to st...Thanks for making time in your very busy day to stop by and comment for Rachel. The first days of school are hectic enough for parents and kids - must be super busy when you're a mom and a teacher! Good luck :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-58588327598543672942012-08-30T07:03:35.220-04:002012-08-30T07:03:35.220-04:00Thanks for your comment for Rachel, TIna. And as ...Thanks for your comment for Rachel, TIna. And as for my office... I got a bit distracted yesterday because it was SO nice outside... Today looks much the same, but I will really try to get back in there and keep up the work. It would actually be really fun to get it clean enough to show you a picture... but I confess, even when it's clean, it's more cluttered than a lot of author/illustrator work spaces you see!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-19382341094151183072012-08-30T06:14:03.092-04:002012-08-30T06:14:03.092-04:00Thanks so much for visiting and commenting for Rac...Thanks so much for visiting and commenting for Rachel, Lisa!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-87683290367763295612012-08-30T04:50:15.834-04:002012-08-30T04:50:15.834-04:00Rachel,
This book sounds like a lot of fun. Your ...Rachel, <br />This book sounds like a lot of fun. Your pitch is spunky and will catch little girls' attention. I, too, like her name. <br /><br /><br />Susanna, <br />When you're finished with your office, we'd love to see pictures :)Tina Chonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-15705524112066629612012-08-30T01:54:41.583-04:002012-08-30T01:54:41.583-04:00Sorry I'm a day late, long day in school today...Sorry I'm a day late, long day in school today! I always love this premise. Princess who does things on her own terms. I agree that point one and point two should be right next to each other for more impact. I, too, love her name and think an illustrator would too.Kimberleynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-60387301170946365032012-08-29T22:33:12.635-04:002012-08-29T22:33:12.635-04:00I would check it out. My own daughter has a very ...I would check it out. My own daughter has a very independent spirit and I think it would appeal to her.Lisa Regannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-15663266202315411692012-08-29T21:34:22.180-04:002012-08-29T21:34:22.180-04:00Thanks so much for your thoughtful comment for Rac...Thanks so much for your thoughtful comment for Rachel, Penny!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-9226438600765974762012-08-29T19:53:00.352-04:002012-08-29T19:53:00.352-04:00Thanks for chiming in, Erik! And I confess, it wa...Thanks for chiming in, Erik! And I confess, it was way too nice outside today to work in my office... so it's not clean yet!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-22609237140550537822012-08-29T19:48:20.630-04:002012-08-29T19:48:20.630-04:00I would read it! I like the idea of this book! :) ...I would read it! I like the idea of this book! :) I really like the pitch too!<br />Erik<br />P.S. Congrats on the Office! This Kid Reviews Bkshttp://twitter.com/ThisKid_Eriknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-36796064695650820112012-08-29T19:23:27.429-04:002012-08-29T19:23:27.429-04:00Thanks for you comment for Rachel, Stina. And I n...Thanks for you comment for Rachel, Stina. And I need to become a best-selling author too :) Also get a maid :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-59188954012455415492012-08-29T19:11:44.385-04:002012-08-29T19:11:44.385-04:00Would I read it? Yes yes yes. It's sounds gre...Would I read it? Yes yes yes. It's sounds greats. :D<br /><br />My mother-in-law told me I need to become a best selling author so I can hire a maid. As if. I would still clean up, not that I do as much as I should right now.Stina Lindenblattnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-40117661560192912122012-08-29T17:29:47.526-04:002012-08-29T17:29:47.526-04:00Me cleaning would do that! Sorry :) Thanks for y...Me cleaning would do that! Sorry :) Thanks for your comment for Rachel!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-19525904838301105752012-08-29T16:59:30.093-04:002012-08-29T16:59:30.093-04:00Susanna I think you just initiated a shift in the ...Susanna I think you just initiated a shift in the space-time-cleaning continuum. Sigh, this means it's time for me to clean my office. Oh well, I knew it couldn't last.<br />And as for the pitch, I think it sounds cute!coleen patrickhttp://coleenpatrick.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-49825882431039907932012-08-29T16:47:15.279-04:002012-08-29T16:47:15.279-04:00Thanks so much for your comments for Rachel, Wendy...Thanks so much for your comments for Rachel, Wendy - very helpful! And as for my office... I have not made as much progress today as I should have. It's such an incredibly beautiful day outside... :) I am the queen of ignoring mess :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.com