tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post172627357185066427..comments2024-02-25T10:47:13.049-05:00Comments on Susanna Leonard Hill: Would You Read It Wednesday #148 - Me Hungry (PB)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comBlogger76125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-22348291519231187752014-10-13T20:07:12.872-04:002014-10-13T20:07:12.872-04:00!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-23041965200108755302014-10-13T08:32:42.684-04:002014-10-13T08:32:42.684-04:00Hehe - so am I! I need this reminder as much as (o...Hehe - so am I! I need this reminder as much as (of not more than) everyone else. :) I just notice it in others' writing LOLJoanne Shernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-24895144702422587552014-10-12T23:04:45.397-04:002014-10-12T23:04:45.397-04:00Thanks for chiming in, Lauri! :)Thanks for chiming in, Lauri! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-20115276313802774642014-10-12T23:03:02.614-04:002014-10-12T23:03:02.614-04:00Thanks, Joanne! I'm afraid I'm an exclama...Thanks, Joanne! I'm afraid I'm an exclamation point over-user too!! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-78769255458107960872014-10-11T17:17:30.355-04:002014-10-11T17:17:30.355-04:00Thanks Joanne :)Thanks Joanne :)Gailnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-19297188931257696962014-10-11T17:16:51.843-04:002014-10-11T17:16:51.843-04:00Thanks Lauri :)Thanks Lauri :)Gailnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-41521896731016745452014-10-11T17:16:34.950-04:002014-10-11T17:16:34.950-04:00Hi Erik! Ted feeds zombie pork chops lol. Thanks ...Hi Erik! Ted feeds zombie pork chops lol. Thanks for your comments :).Gailnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-86159908964249396922014-10-11T17:05:24.083-04:002014-10-11T17:05:24.083-04:00Yes - great, intriguing story. The pitch felt long...Yes - great, intriguing story. The pitch felt long to me - trim it if you can - and watch the exclamation points, I think. Great use of alliteration in the pitch - I hope it is as abundant in the story itself :)Joanne Shernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-50070279527005872512014-10-11T15:50:44.344-04:002014-10-11T15:50:44.344-04:00Sounds delightfully creepy! all the good advice ha...Sounds delightfully creepy! all the good advice has been given.Lauri Meyersnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-457429487888640562014-10-10T07:38:21.220-04:002014-10-10T07:38:21.220-04:00:D LOVE Tasty-Kakes!!!:D LOVE Tasty-Kakes!!!This_Kid_Reviews_Books_Eriknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-84424786918858764152014-10-09T19:09:52.440-04:002014-10-09T19:09:52.440-04:00Such lovely peeps we have here :)Such lovely peeps we have here :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-6836482147443394102014-10-09T19:09:38.210-04:002014-10-09T19:09:38.210-04:00Thanks for your comments for Ms. Talbot, Erik! I ...Thanks for your comments for Ms. Talbot, Erik! I guess this pitch would be up your alley :)<br />Now. Let's talk about Tasty-Kake! You live in the land of the Tasyy-Kake, don't you? Until this week, I didn't know that Pennsylvania was Tasty-Kake capitol!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-876598639798650552014-10-09T17:38:41.113-04:002014-10-09T17:38:41.113-04:00Congrats to Ms. Hope! :D I hope that you have a fu...Congrats to Ms. Hope! :D I hope that you have a fun time while the Hornets vacation! ;)<br />I like the pitch. I like Master Chef meets Goosebumps :) I am wondering what kind of food Ted feeds the zombies... <br />Does a chocolate Tasty·Kake count? ;)This_Kid_Reviews_Books_Eriknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-71841696595750269192014-10-09T14:43:42.902-04:002014-10-09T14:43:42.902-04:00I'm sure Erin will have helpful comments for y...I'm sure Erin will have helpful comments for you, Hope :) Thanks for your feedback for Gail!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-79620785539810590342014-10-09T14:43:06.651-04:002014-10-09T14:43:06.651-04:00Thanks so much for your help with Gail's pitch...Thanks so much for your help with Gail's pitch, Keila! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-13463184953360059492014-10-09T14:41:56.865-04:002014-10-09T14:41:56.865-04:00Brownie points for you, Maria, for being the only ...Brownie points for you, Maria, for being the only one to try your hand at a different version of the raspberry story :) (And by "brownie" points, I do mean brownies! :)) Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments for Gail, too!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-13485515485898354532014-10-09T11:16:24.668-04:002014-10-09T11:16:24.668-04:00Hope the revisions will go well, Gail! Now that Su...Hope the revisions will go well, Gail! Now that Susanna has suggested I use a fork or spork, I will keep my keyboard clean and type easier. LOL!Teresa Robesonhttp://teresarobeson.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-52107152156990605082014-10-09T11:15:21.945-04:002014-10-09T11:15:21.945-04:00Sporks! Yes! LOL!Sporks! Yes! LOL!Teresa Robesonhttp://teresarobeson.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-82283230345809284342014-10-09T09:29:25.319-04:002014-10-09T09:29:25.319-04:00My biggest thanks again for all of the WONDERFUL f...My biggest thanks again for all of the WONDERFUL feedback. It is so, so helpful :)Gailnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-89905700348227972472014-10-09T09:27:53.622-04:002014-10-09T09:27:53.622-04:00Thanks Barbara! I'm glad you like teeny-tiny z...Thanks Barbara! I'm glad you like teeny-tiny zombie...he is a cute monster, although very hungry!Gailnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-8158940313104296752014-10-09T09:27:23.228-04:002014-10-09T09:27:23.228-04:00Thanks Nancy. I'm so glad you like the pitch! ...Thanks Nancy. I'm so glad you like the pitch! And, it will be be pared post-haste lol!Gailnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-21349355732175376242014-10-09T09:25:17.466-04:002014-10-09T09:25:17.466-04:00Thanks Cathy - I really appreciate your feedback (...Thanks Cathy - I really appreciate your feedback (gave me a big smile!).Gailnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-47582784175327350762014-10-09T09:24:51.642-04:002014-10-09T09:24:51.642-04:00Hi Wendy - done and done! It will be shortened and...Hi Wendy - done and done! It will be shortened and it will get a re-worked last line. Thanks so much :)Gailnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-31254420432911207952014-10-09T09:24:10.833-04:002014-10-09T09:24:10.833-04:00I am going to really re-work the "under his b...I am going to really re-work the "under his blanket" sentence because I think it might steer the pitch away from the actual plot. Thank you for your feedback Teresa!<br /><br />Have a great day, and enjoy those sticky fingers :)Gailnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-1743973149198480252014-10-09T09:22:14.549-04:002014-10-09T09:22:14.549-04:00Thanks so much Pam! I will definitely re-work the ...Thanks so much Pam! I will definitely re-work the last sentence because Ted and zombie do become friends. The fear is overcome when Ted meets zombie at the beginning of the story (friendship is his reward for facing fears). I'm going to really look hard at the emotional elements and see if they can help put the "zing" into the pitch.Gailnoreply@blogger.com