tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post1721449755436875611..comments2024-02-25T10:47:13.049-05:00Comments on Susanna Leonard Hill: Would You Read It #117 - Tell Me About The Baby (MG Novel In Verse) PLUS Straight From The Editor!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17655630528649780363noreply@blogger.comBlogger98125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-77212799763956264772014-01-19T16:57:37.987-05:002014-01-19T16:57:37.987-05:00Oh wow! That is really something! I don't th...Oh wow! That is really something! I don't think I could even write one sonnet :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-71686079866662968192014-01-19T16:55:56.737-05:002014-01-19T16:55:56.737-05:00I will have to investigate!I will have to investigate!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-56325909394285420632014-01-18T15:47:33.968-05:002014-01-18T15:47:33.968-05:00I love that you marinate in PBs Julie! :) I might...I love that you marinate in PBs Julie! :) I might have to borrow that :) Thanks so much for your help for Joy!Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-35610152040108155142014-01-18T12:21:18.059-05:002014-01-18T12:21:18.059-05:00UGH! I AM the typo-queen!UGH! I AM the typo-queen!Julie Rowan-Zochhttp://julierowanzoch.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-37136369933839841282014-01-18T12:20:41.033-05:002014-01-18T12:20:41.033-05:00Late to the party, but I had a lovely day visiting...Late to the party, but I had a lovely day visiting a friend in Boulder! Thanks of corse to Erin for all her useful comments - so grateful! <br /><br />From the title of this pitch, I assumed it was a PB, but hey, that's what I marinate in! And the reason given suits well. I agree it needs tightening and no rhetorical questions. here is my crunched up crack at it:<br /><br />After the auto accident, Sara must adjust to a new town, new school, new friends, her older brother's fatherly advice, a pregnant sister-in-law, and the deafening grief of losing their parents.Julie Rowan-Zochhttp://julierowanzoch.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-37144766737744290272014-01-17T08:45:39.683-05:002014-01-17T08:45:39.683-05:00I would love to stay connected. If you like, do fr...I would love to stay connected. If you like, do friend me on FB. :)Joanna Marplenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-58888730555767896712014-01-17T08:06:45.104-05:002014-01-17T08:06:45.104-05:00Thank you! I loved WHAT MY MOTHER... By Sonya Sone...Thank you! I loved WHAT MY MOTHER... By Sonya Sones (she is great) but haven't read any of the others, so they are going on my list.Joanna Marplenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-75036848673428455562014-01-17T07:29:12.082-05:002014-01-17T07:29:12.082-05:00Well, Mom and I love white chocolate AND... well, ...Well, Mom and I love white chocolate AND... well, one of the best B-Day presents ever! (and yes, they are Reese's Peanut Butter Cups) :D And Ms. Joy's cookie sounds delicious!This_Kid_Reviews_Books_Eriknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-28348026313106746332014-01-17T01:01:37.140-05:002014-01-17T01:01:37.140-05:00Thank God we probably live far enough away! lol I ...Thank God we probably live far enough away! lol I can't stay on a diet as it is, but THIS looks WAY too good! lol:Donna Marienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-67858682666238407672014-01-17T00:35:42.485-05:002014-01-17T00:35:42.485-05:00Joanna,
I'm really enjoying this dialog. Th...Joanna,<br /> I'm really enjoying this dialog. Thanks.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-54207401339659558702014-01-17T00:29:07.006-05:002014-01-17T00:29:07.006-05:00Joanna,
Thank you for the suggestions. I'l...Joanna,<br /> Thank you for the suggestions. I'll include the books of Ron Koertge. SHAKESPEARE BATS CLEANUP, is a good one of his. WHO WILL TELL MY BROTHER by Marlene Carwell is an oldie but a goodie too. And pardon my blocked brain, but who wrote WHAT MY MOTHER DOESN'T KNOW and STOP PRETENDING? I haven't read as many novels in verse as I probably should, but I can get to work on that too.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-61674253063523131462014-01-17T00:13:23.119-05:002014-01-17T00:13:23.119-05:00Susanna,
Out of the Dust is really a triumph in...Susanna,<br /> Out of the Dust is really a triumph in poetry. Everyone of the poems in the story is a sonnet. 14 lines of pure beauty and a story arc too. I personally have a real difficult time writing sonnets, I keep wanting to bust out of iambic pentameter. Jane Yolen had a whole book of sonnets she wrote when her husband was in the hospital. I do admire that work.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-43968226922510815982014-01-17T00:07:30.228-05:002014-01-17T00:07:30.228-05:00Denise,
Thanks for mentioning the questions mak...Denise,<br /> Thanks for mentioning the questions making the reader work. I hadn't considered that. You're right, of course and you've helped to teach me something. I appreciate that and your taking the time to comment. Thank you.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-1698233388022694092014-01-17T00:05:08.733-05:002014-01-17T00:05:08.733-05:00Joanne,
Thanks for the thumbs up. I appreciat...Joanne,<br /> Thanks for the thumbs up. I appreciate your taking the time to comment. I'll keep working on this manuscript.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-74220742168293390572014-01-17T00:03:54.310-05:002014-01-17T00:03:54.310-05:00Lauri,
Thanks for your suggestions. I am so gr...Lauri,<br /> Thanks for your suggestions. I am so grateful for your help with my writing.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-56890695643559611922014-01-17T00:02:11.615-05:002014-01-17T00:02:11.615-05:00Pam,
You are right on the money. I've GOT ...Pam,<br /> You are right on the money. I've GOT to work out some of those emotional issues with specific details. thanks for your comment. I appreciate your taking the time to leave a message. Thank you.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-17964289422577251422014-01-17T00:00:15.386-05:002014-01-17T00:00:15.386-05:00Kristen,
Thanks for leaving your comments. I&#...Kristen,<br /> Thanks for leaving your comments. I've been so impressed with how helpful everyone is. This is a great community. Friends and chocolate--it doesn't get much better. I appreciate you.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-74753892545846440722014-01-16T23:58:04.728-05:002014-01-16T23:58:04.728-05:00Oh, gosh Penny. I guess I was the piggie that ate...Oh, gosh Penny. I guess I was the piggie that ate your piece. I was hoping you wouldn't notice. Can I send you some of my triple chocolate ginger cookies? Thank you for your kind comments and I'll try to save you a piece next time.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-39119865474121202892014-01-16T23:54:57.891-05:002014-01-16T23:54:57.891-05:00Patricia,
I agree, Erin's comments for pitc...Patricia,<br /> I agree, Erin's comments for pitch writing are VERY good. there is so much to learn. This has been a valuable exercise for me. I appreciate your comments and everybody's help.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-90535599058132724282014-01-16T23:52:56.842-05:002014-01-16T23:52:56.842-05:00Hey Donna, I'm with you on the munchies. Wher...Hey Donna, I'm with you on the munchies. Where can we meet to organize a raid on Susanna's larder?Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-3531438402387128282014-01-16T23:51:09.623-05:002014-01-16T23:51:09.623-05:00Thanks Eric. I enjoy reading your blog. And than...Thanks Eric. I enjoy reading your blog. And thanks for passing on the info about a White Chocolate Peanut Butter Cup. Oh that sounds yummy. I'm eating a triple chocolate ginger cookie right now.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-67932451176472290292014-01-16T23:49:05.022-05:002014-01-16T23:49:05.022-05:00Julie,
Thanks for your comment. The title'...Julie,<br /> Thanks for your comment. The title's connotations I hadn't considered. This is good to know. Thanks.Joynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-33339352086262574132014-01-16T21:36:34.755-05:002014-01-16T21:36:34.755-05:00I didn't even know there WAS such a thing as a...I didn't even know there WAS such a thing as a white chocolate peanut butter cup! What is that? A Reese's Peanut Butter Cup's poor cousin? :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-29829520125979111862014-01-16T20:17:33.080-05:002014-01-16T20:17:33.080-05:00Thanks so much for sharing your helpful thoughts w...Thanks so much for sharing your helpful thoughts with Joy, Julie! :)Susanna Leonard Hillhttp://susannahill.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1007703247358638748.post-25824158645624460142014-01-16T19:23:35.080-05:002014-01-16T19:23:35.080-05:00Hi Joy
I would read this as it is very relevant to...Hi Joy<br />I would read this as it is very relevant to what kids are facing today, but the title for me is very much a non fiction facts of life book. As others suggested, the questions in your pitch are not making it shine, with some rewording and removing them, you will have a great query. Best wishesJulie Grassonoreply@blogger.com