The dogs are shedding. (Full time work.)
My husband and kids are all taking turns being on school vacation with some overlaps, but basically from March 1 - March 31 one, two or three of them are home at a time. This is lovely on every level except getting work done. So anyone who happens to be waiting on me for anything, that's why :) And I promise I haven't forgotten you!
The snow is melting. (Yes! Really! Although it's got a long way to go...)
Yesterday was idyllic! 59 degrees and sunny! I know we have yet to pass the midpoint of March, but it was the kind of day that fills you with the hope and belief that spring is actually thinking about coming. After this winter, it is just so welcome. I took #5 out horseback riding, and the other two horses jumped out of the pasture and came to join us, galloping and leaping and cavorting like colts, skidding on leftover ice and charging through substantial slushy snow, jumping out of their skins with happiness at being able to stretch their legs and run. Even though it took us 45 minutes to catch them and get everyone safely back in the barn, it was lovely to see them so happy. Everyone was feeling a little spring fever :)
So. Writing, riding, blogging, teaching, school visiting, spring vacationing, critiquing, barn cleaning,
And now it's time for Would You Read It, but first, for today's Something Chocolate, I believe I've discovered an idea whose time has come (really, why have I never seen these before???)
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Yes. You may have another :)
Now then. Today's pitch comes to us from Ann who says, "I have only been writing seriously for a year. An interesting fact about me is that I have an identical twin sister named Donna and my husband has an identical twin brother named Don. I am an elementary school teacher. I have always loved children's books and meeting authors (I even met Lois Lowry in the early 1990's where she signed a quilt my students and I made in honor of Number the Stars). I'm an avid reader, especially YA. I like to scrapbook, bake, cook. and take photos."
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: Sk8ter Boy
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 5-8)
The Pitch: Peter wants to be an ice skater but can’t because he’s homeless, and he doesn’t have the money for a pair of skates. But when there’s a poetry contest at school with a cash prize, he is able to make his smooth words glide and spin so that he wins the skates and his classmates’ respect.
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Ann improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above. There are openings in June so you've got a little time to polish up your pitches and send yours for your chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!
Ann is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! I am looking forward to having family home in whatever combinations they arrive in and to more days like yesterday as spring begins to overtake winter and to the March Madness Writing Contest (even though I haven't the slightest idea what I'm going to write for my sample or when I'm going to write it!)
Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone :)
Ann is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! I am looking forward to having family home in whatever combinations they arrive in and to more days like yesterday as spring begins to overtake winter and to the March Madness Writing Contest (even though I haven't the slightest idea what I'm going to write for my sample or when I'm going to write it!)
Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone :)
Oh yes, yesterday was glorious here in the Hudson valley!
ReplyDeleteI love Ann's story idea! And the pitch is nice and concise. I love the second sentence- especially "his smooth words glide and spin." Well done! A couple of tips: I would take the "8" out of the title as that suggests a counting book. I would also condense the first sentence a bit. Maybe something like this? "Peter dreams of being an ice skater, but he is homeless and can't afford a pair of skates.
"Dreams" seems more compelling than "wants" but that is a personal choice. Either one is fine, really. I'd love to read this story!
Yes! I would read it! I, too, would take the 8 out of the title for the same reason as Iza's comment below, but also because it sounds like a Twitter handle or some shorthand that may detract from the seriousness of his dream & the homelessness. Other than that, BRAVA!!! Good luck and I hope to see it in Barnes & Noble!!
ReplyDeleteOooh, crocuses! Last year, ours came out in Feb; this year, not a peep out of them yet.
ReplyDeleteThe dessert looks amazing; I need the sugar/caffeine buzz!
I also like and would read Ann's pitch/story. The 8 in the title is cute but then the pitch didn't mention anything that hinted at why "skate" was spelled that way.
I actually loved Iza's suggestions so I'll second hers. :)
Okay, busy lady, have a good second half of the week!
Glad things are warming up for you Susanna :)
ReplyDeleteI would read it based on the pitch! I also like what Iza had to suggest about the title and dreams. Another thing that drew me in to wanting to read it was when you added how gains respect from his classmates. Good luck :)
Maybe I would read this. The 8 in the title throws me off, makes me think of skateboarding rather than ice skating (as well as Avril Lavigne's song Sk8er Boi).
ReplyDeleteI also wonder (without knowing more about the story) is being homeless a big part of the story? If not could he just be poor? While homelessness is a serious issue that many children do have to face, I wonder if it would turn off some readers.
Do love the comment others made about dreams vs. wants.
Good Luck! :)
Ann, I love your pitch - I would definitely read it. I especially liked "he is able to make his smooth words glide and spin . . ." Very nice.
ReplyDeleteYes, I'd read it. This has all the elements for an intriguing and heartwarming story. The first sentence might be tightened a little. Maybe: "Peter dreams of being an ice skater, but he's homeless and can't afford a pair of skates." In a pitch, do you have to tell the whole story? If not, what if you left us wondering how he solves his problem or whether he wins the contest? Just a thought. It sounds like a really neat story! :-) I hope this is helpful.
ReplyDeleteThe chocolate pie brownie is calling my name! I must be brave. . .
ReplyDeleteI would definitely read! I did feel as if the pitch read more like a synopsis by giving the ending away. I've read entirely opposing ideas on that so that's just my opinion. I also wondered if there is more than one "attempt" to get the ice skate money or just the poetry contest. The pitch left me wondering how visual the book would be.
Ann, this definitely has wonderful kid-appeal! (I'm a "retired" elementary teacher!) Iza really made many of the points I would mention, especially rewording and tightening the first sentence. I also agree that the "8" in the title is a bit distracting. The story element about earning his classmates' respect is great, but perhaps you might try to leave this for the reader to discover? ( "When Peter enters a school poetry contest, there's more than just a cash prize at stake.")
ReplyDeleteSusanna- Thank you for the rays of spring sunshine emanating from the snow-surrounded crocuses (croci? LOL). I hope the snow blanket here recedes in time for my tulips and daffodils to be tempted to poke up with their greens. If not, I'll just have to indulge in a chocolate cream brownie as I watch and wait.
Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments for Ann, Charlotte! And enjoy the brownies while you wait for spring... it will be here eventually :)
ReplyDeleteExcellent points, Wendy! Thank you so much for your input. And I'm sorry - I didn't mean to tempt you if you're abstaining... :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for sharing your observations with Ann, Cheryl. I know she will find them helpful :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for chiming in for Ann, Pat :)
ReplyDeleteSo funny - I thought of Sk8er Boi too :) Although I've read the story (it's lovely!) and it's nothing like Avril Lavigne :) Thanks so much for your helpful comments for Ann, Kimberly!
ReplyDeleteI hope they're warming up for you too, Jen! :) Thanks so much for your comments for Ann!
ReplyDeleteThose aren't actually my crocuses... just wishful thinking :) Enjoy the dessert, thanks for your excellent comments for Ann, and zoom! off we go to be productive! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your helpful comments and enthusiasm for Ann, Sallieanne! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your very helpful and insightful comments, Iza! I have had the privilege of reading this story, and it's a good one! Fingers crossed for Ann :)
ReplyDeleteYes, I would read this! I was drawn in by two things. The boy is homeless. There are few books about them--they are kids like any others. And he enters a poetry contest. This shows another facet of the character. Both are unexpected elements. I agree with Charlotte's suggestion. And a cash prize seems less coincidental than skates which is just what he needs. I expected a YA book from the title, so I agree with the other comments.
ReplyDeleteI love this idea, Ann! Your second sentence is very visual - I can clearly imagine the illustrations. As others have said in previous comments, the first sentence could be tweaked and tightened a bit, but overall, great job on the pitch!
ReplyDeleteSusanna - I love those brownies! Spring is in the air here, too, but we have to endure another weird weather roller-coaster today and tomorrow before the temps rebound upwards on Friday. Yesterday was beautiful, though.
All we have to do is BELIEVE and spring will finally come to stay! :)
I'd read this! It sound so fun! I agree that the first sentence needs to be clarified and tightened, but the concept is great!
ReplyDeleteI'd read this! I agree with many of the other comments: The title throws me a little and I, wouldn't give away the ending but leave it as a cliff-hanger.
ReplyDeleteSusanna - you have me Spring-dreaming :)
Thanks for your helpful input for Ann, Tonja! And ah, spring dreaming! I think it's what we're all doing! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for your thoughts for Ann, Donna! And yes, I agree - very dreamy :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing your reaction with Ann, Julie! And yes - you should have seen the horses yesterday - they were totally nuts! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for chiming in for Ann, Kirsti!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your insights for Ann, Martha! Glad you liked the brownies :) And I BELIEVE you're right - spring will come if we all just BELIEVE! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for sharing your thoughts for Ann, Pat! I agree - I like those two elements as well!
ReplyDeleteEnjoy the warm temps, Susanna...I think we are in for more snow and cold.:) :)
ReplyDeleteAnd thanks for the chocolate brownie...looks like perfection.:)
I would definitely read this book! Ann, I think your pitch has great rhythm...it flows really well...I agree with the others...leave us wondering and wanting more at the end of the pitch.:) I read what the others said about the title...but I think using Sk8ter is really creative.
Thanks so much for your comments for Ann, Vivian! And yes... I fear you may be in the 10-20 inches of snow belt... But it's still MARCH! The snow has to stop eventually :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful pitch and concept. I imagine this as a many-layered picture book with timely themes.
ReplyDeleteAgent Mira Reisberg suggests an editor wants to see the ending in the pitch to be sure the author knows how to write one. However, if you are concerned about revealing too much, I'd drop "wins the skates" but keep the "respect" part.
I'm sure your teaching experience helps you portray homelessness in a realistic way. My only concern is does the pitch convey you are able to layer that in appropriately.
Well done. I look forward to reading it someday!
It's warm and sunny in San Francisco, but check back in an hour. I'll be in the Midwest in a couple of weeks, so I hope it stays spring!
ReplyDeleteI don't know that I would read this story, and I'm wondering if it's because I live in a city where homelessness is a huge issue. Or maybe it's because I've written quite a bit about migrant worker families who are marginalized and often half a step away from homelessness or who are homeless. I'm wondering what this boy will do once he gets his skates. Who will take him to the skating rink? Who will pay his rink fees? And I'm wondering if this story trivializes, in some way, the issue of being homeless. But I can see that many others have very positive responses to this pitch, so I may be way off base.
I give it a "yes" because Peter sounds like an interesting character. It also seems like a good book for teaching empathy to my kids (not every kid has a home and more toys than they need, not to mention having their basic needs met).
ReplyDeleteHaving read the comments below, I have to agree that the title is a little distracting/confusing. I definitely wasn't expecting him to be an ice skater.
It's an interesting mix: homelessness, a boy who wants to be an ice skater and writes poetry. Are you purposely going for non-stereotypical "boy" activities? I wondered about that and if there was a reason. If not, maybe Peter could be a speed skater which may attract more boys to the story.
I could also imagine this character at the center of a Middle Grade book where you could explore the themes in more depth. You wouldn't want to gloss over the issue of homelessness and the limited length of a PB might make it difficult to do this topic justice.
Now I really want to read the full PB, so that confirms my "yes". Good luck!
Hi Ann - I initially thought maybe, than thought yes, so I am somewhere in the middle! Like some of the other comments, by the title (which I really liked), I was expecting a skateboarding related book. I really liked the first sentence of your pitch, thought it had a good hook to it. I think it was the second sentence that left me wondering what the real conflict is. Perhaps you don't need "and his classmates respect?" at the end, and focus the pitch on his issues of homelessness and what the main problem is (he needs money to pursue his dream) but don't give it all away as to how he solves it. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteSusanna - where do I find those delicious brownies! Yum!!
I would read it yes, but I was also thrown by the title. I think Julie has made a good point that this would be great as a chapter book, giving you more scope to delve into the issue of Peter being homeless and how to resolve that as well as the skating. We don't really have ice skating much in Australia, but I believe boys would want to skate to become hockey players more than figure skaters, so maybe that could be woven in somehow. Best wishes on this.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Iza for your "dream" idea because that's exactly what skating is to Peter. He practices his "Figure 8" in his socks on the shiny shelter floor. His winning poem is called" Figure 8" too, hence the PB title. I may need to rethink that. I appreciate you taking a look. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Sallianne, for your interest in my story--I hope to see it in B & N too someday :) I appreciate your helpful comments.
ReplyDeleteHi Teresa! Thanks for taking a look at my pitch. The 8 refers to the "figure 8" Peter practices on the shiny shelter floor in his socks everyday and to the title of his winning poem. Perhaps I should rethink it. Thanks again for your thoughts.
ReplyDeleteJen, thanks so much for taking a look. I appreciate your thoughts and good luck wishes!
ReplyDeleteWendy, I have heard conflicting ideas also about including the ending in a pitch. I'll have to keep researching and keep an ear to the ground on that one. The poetry contest is the only solution to getting the ice skates, but there is a bit of a "3-prong attempt" at it. Thanks for your thoughts!
ReplyDeleteCharlotte, thanks so much for your helpful comments. The 8 in the title refers to the figure eights Peter practices everyday in his socks on the shiny floor of the shelter. The poem is also about the "Figure 8" in ice skating. I've heard conflicting ideas from editors and agents about including the story's resolution in a pitch. I appreciate your taking a look!
ReplyDeleteHow blessed you are to own horses! Enjoy your beautiful harbingers of Spring, Susanna.
ReplyDeleteHi, Pat, my fellow Picture Book Scribbler! Thanks for your thoughts on my pitch and my story. As always, I'm very appreciative of your helpful comments. I was hoping to create an interesting, sensitive character in Peter. I'll see what other titles might work so it would read more like a PB.
ReplyDeleteMartha, thanks so much for taking a look at my pitch. Visual elements are definitely my strong suit--maybe my only one! :)--so I try to capitalize on it when I can. I'll look at tweaking the first sentence. I appreciate your helpful comments.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kirsti, for your enthusiasm about my story. I appreciate your taking a look.
ReplyDeleteI'm late joining in today :) but I'm glad there are brownies left! This is a yes for me. I agree with the others regarding the title - while it is clever I would expect either a counting book or skateboarding for an older age. The subject matter has me also agreeing with others that a chapter book would delve into this matter in a more meaningful way. However - Those Shoes by Maribeth Boelts shows us there is definitely room for books with more diverse characters that also help children to understand empathy. The first sentence of the pitch though needs more showing less telling for me and it makes me wonder if his family has had a better turn in fortune that he would use his money for skates and could afford to go skating but I love the second sentence. So not knowing if a good samaritan spots him skating, the talent of his writing, or working to somehow help his family and steps in to help with the ice time problem - Maybe something like : Peter wants to be an ice skater but moving out of the shelter would be first on his list. When there’s a poetry contest at school with a cash prize, he is able to make his smooth words glide and spin so that he finds a way to have both.
ReplyDeleteGood luck with a wonderful subject!
Thanks, Julie, for your helpful comments. I'm hoping I can pull this story idea off as a PB, but I know what you mean about the chapter book idea. I think it could work as that too, but I don't know the first thing about writing one--maybe someday I'll study that! I've heard conflicting thoughts from agents/editors about including the story resolution in a pitch/query. It's very subjective, I think. I appreciate your thoughts!
ReplyDeleteHello my fellow Picture Book Scribbler! Thanks for taking a look at my pitch--you know I value your opinion, as always! I appreciate your thoughts not giving away the ending, but I know some editors who say they want it--who knows? Thanks again!
ReplyDeleteTonja, thanks for your comments about my pitch. I know some editors who want to know the endings in pitches and queries, so I'm not sure whether to include or exclude them. The title refers to the figure 8 Peter practices every day in his socks on the shiny floor of the shelter. His winning poem is also called Figure 8. I appreciate your taking a look!
ReplyDeleteYou're right about those conflicting thoughts on pitches, Ann. It's just my preference to be left wondering...a little!
ReplyDeleteVivian, thanks for your thoughts on my pitch. I do really like the SK8ER BOY title because it refers to the figure eights he practices every day in his socks on the shiny shelter floor. His winning poem is also called Figure 8. I'm not sure whether to include the ending in pitches--some editors I know want them--it's confusing! Anyway, I appreciate your kind comments.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your thoughtful comments on my pitch, Joanne. This story is based on a true story about a boy who lived in a homeless shelter but wanted to be an ice skater. It's mostly about his being true to his dream, but he is just an ordinary kid too. I appreciate your good wishes for my story!
ReplyDeleteI would read this - but I agree with Charlotte - I would change the last sentence to have a cliff hanger..."..But when there is a poetry contest at school with a cash prize, there is more than just a cash prize at stake." I know it depends on the agent or editor reading these pitches - but that last sentence makes me REALLY want to read the book. Best of luck...
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your thoughts for Ann, Beth - I'm sure she'll find them helpful :)
ReplyDeleteThank you for your very thoughtful suggestions for Ann, Kim!
ReplyDeleteWe have one pony, Jarm. We are able to keep her because a friend very kindly gives us space in her barn in return for some help around the barn. It's lovely, and we are VERY lucky!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your thoughts for Ann, Linda! And I know... I wish my house was all spring-cleaned, but the idea is overwhelming!!! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your impressions with Ann, Julie. It's so great to get objective opinions!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your comments for Ann, Karen. And as for the brownies... hang on... recipe here: http://www.handletheheat.com/2013/09/chocolate-cream-pie-brownies.html :)
ReplyDeleteThank you for your thoughtful comments for Ann, Kristen. I'm interested in people's different options for skating - you mentioned speed skating which I didn't even think of, and someone else mentioned hockey!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for sharing your thoughts with Ann, Jiliane. I think it's good to get different perspectives. It might be good for her to think about your concerns and see if her story runs afoul of them in any way. Definitely food for thought!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your very thoughtful comments and suggestions for Ann, Joanne!
ReplyDeleteI would read it because it has action and tension potrntial.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for chiming in for Ann, Faith :)
ReplyDeleteI would read the book. It sounds like it has a great story behind it. This sounds like it could be a chapter book too. The last sentence confused me because it says he wins the skates - I had to go back and read if the skates were the prize, but cash was the prize. Good luck! :)
ReplyDeleteYum! Brownies! :D
I would read it. Love the idea of him entering a contest so that he can get his skates.i agree with many of the others about leaving a bit of a cliff-hanger.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your thoughts, Erik. I appreciate your opinions about the last sentence--I'll take another look at it. I hope to do this story justice as a PB, but if not, maybe a chapter book!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for sharing your impressions with Ms. Magee, Erik! I'm sure she'll find them helpful :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Bev, for your thoughts. I'm going to write the pitch as a cliffhanger and as a non-cliffhanger and try to figure out which editors want which, then send them the appropriate ones. I know some like to know the ending and not have to guess. I appreciate your opinions.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for chiming in for Ann, Bev! Every opinion is so helpful! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Faith. I hope to make the reader care about what happens to Peter and his dream.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Beth, for your thoughts on my pitch. I decided to tailor my pitch to what each editor prefers. Some like to know the ending, some don't. Looks like I have some research to do. I appreciate your ideas!
ReplyDeleteWow, thanks for the rewrite! Your thoughts will help me consider what to do next with this project. I appreciate you taking the time to be so thorough. SK8ER refers to the figure 8 he practices in his socks every day on the shiny shelter floor and his winning poem title. I'm getting Those Shoes from the library--sounds like a book I'd like to read. Thanks again!
ReplyDeleteMy pleasure! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for your opinions on my pitch, Linda. I like Sk8er too. It refers to the way Peter skates figure eights on the shiny floor of the shelter everyday in his socks and to the title of his winning poem. If I find I can't make it work as a PB, I'll take a chapter book class and go from there, I guess. Thanks again!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your thoughts, Julie. If I can't make this idea work as a PB, I guess I'll try my hand a chapter books. :) SK8ER refers to the way Peter practices figure eights every day in his socks on the shiny shelter floor. It's also the title of his winning poem. Thanks for your help!
ReplyDeleteHi Karen--thanks for your thoughts on my pitch. I like the title too. Sometimes it's good to find the unexpected in a book. Some editors prefer to know the ending in a pitch, and some don't. I'll have to have two versions and go from there. Thanks again!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kristen, for your advice about my story. Sk8er refers to Peter practicing his figure eights everyday in his socks on the shiny floor of the shelter and to the title of his winning poem. If I can't make it work as a PB, I guess I'll learn more about Chapter books and go from there. Thanks again!
ReplyDeleteJilanne, thanks for your thoughts about my story. The theme of the book is about being true to your dreams, no matter your situation. Peter would be illustrated skating in a pubic park in his neighborhood at the end--no rinks. If I can't achieve this in a PB, then I will try with a chapter book. You're right--the issue of homelessness is a serious one, but I feel kids need to know how it affects other kids who just want to be like everyone else. Thanks again!
ReplyDeleteI did the same thing as Erik. I thought the prize was the skates. I wanted more of a cliffhanger too. Good luck with your story. Susanna, good luck with your time and the driving AGAIN!
ReplyDeleteI love that his 'smooth words glide and spin'...he may not be an expert skater but he certainly sounds like an expert poet...I'd definitely read it!! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your comments for Ann, Stacy! And for the good luck - I need it! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your thoughts, Jennifer - I'm sure Ann will be glad to hear them! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jennifer, for your encouraging words. I appreciate your opinions!
ReplyDeleteAh! Do mention that in the pitch if you'd like to keep the title the way it is. Some of us who aren't as knowledgeable about skating wouldn't get it right away and need it explained. :) Best of luck to you! It really does sound like an excellent story!
ReplyDeleteI'm sure most years, your crocuses would be up by now. Hope your week continues to be productive! :)
ReplyDeleteContinues? I'm still waiting for it to GET productive! I'm so behind *she wailed* I need another chocolate cream pie brownie *sniff*
ReplyDeleteIf I were to pick up this book in a bookstore or library my maybe would likely change to a yes. Seeing the Sk8ter illustrated would make more sense. And since his homelessness is an important part of the story I would definitely keep it, I think I would realize this if I flipped through the pages after reading the jacket blurb.
ReplyDeleteHopefully you got some good advice from all of these comments. It's made me realize that reading a pitch on a computer screen or piece of paper (as an editor/agent would read it) is far different that reading it as a book jacket blur (as a library or bookstore customer). Makes me wonder if I should re-evaluate my pitch but I've already sent it to Susanna. Oh well, I'm sure that's why she does WYRI, to help us all learn!
There's been a lot of discussion about the format of this book. I wanted to add that I think this ms has a good chance as a pb. I love that the focus of this book is not on the cure for Peter's homelessness. I think that gives you a unique theme. And your basis in reality will ensure you don't treat the subject lightly. Don't forget to add that info in your cover letter. Read the powerful Fly Away Home by Eve Bunting to see if homelessness can be tackled in 32 pages. I say, sub it out! Let the editor decide if she thinks it is appropriate. And while your waiting for a response, research chapter books. I think there is definitely room for a series about a homeless boy, but it may not be a series about Peter. Fingers crossed!
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad my kids are all home at the same time for vacation. It makes life easier for planning trips. :)
ReplyDeleteLove those flowers. I can't wait for our spring flowers to make an appearance!!!!
I can't wait for ours either, Stina! Those aren't mine... just wishful thinking :)
ReplyDeleteI do, Kimberly, but you are welcome to update your pitch anytime you like! I understand (especially when your date is months away!) that you might want to tweak your pitch, so feel free to send me an update any time! I confess that I am not so organized as to have already written my June posts :)
ReplyDeleteSorry I'm late Ann! I'm sure you've already gotten lots of great feedback. Yummm! I'm going to see about making those Susanna! I love that his smooth words glide and spin, lovely descriptive language for someone who wants to skate! Perhaps the skates could be the prize? Seems like if he won money his family would need it more than he needed skates. Sounds like an interesting story. I'd read it! :D
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your comments for Ann, Meg - no such thing as late around here :) And if you want the recipe, click on Handle The Heat under the photo!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your thoughts, Meg. I appreciate your taking a look. I'll rethink the prize idea.
ReplyDeleteI'm the good twin, too! Thanks for your thoughts.
ReplyDeleteI definitely would read this! I have a feeling it'll show us the poem, too, which I'm sure, kids and adults will love. I also love the smooth words glide and spin. What a perfectly put pitch!
ReplyDeleteThe one thing...I'm with Meg. I'd have him win the skates, instead of the money, or maybe you already have it that when he won the money, he gives it away and then is blessed by someone else with the skates :) I can't wait to read it, Ann :)
Thank you so much for your helpful comments and suggestions for Ann, Denise! :)
ReplyDeleteDenise, thanks for your thoughts on my pitch. I appreciate your comments and your enthusiasm for my story!
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